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Saturday, December 31, 2005

Happy New Year!
I'd write something meaningful, but I'm listening to the NBC special's attempts to be meaningful and I'm finding it annoying, so I'll spare you my version of New Year's sappiness. I'll just share with you my one resolution for 2006: Get something published. That's it. Last year I got some things written. This year I'm going to get some things published. We'll see how it works out.
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Try this. Flatwood is a surreal comic set in a world of darkness which might just be the afterlife. Full of Biblical allusions and scary creatures, there's quite a bit that remains unclear. Initially, the comics are hard to read, as the order in which events happen is difficult to figure out, but it gets better. The artwork is surreal rather than realistic, and you may find the caricatured figures off-putting at first, but stick with it, as there's nothing cute about the story. Many of the comics are animated, so be sure to wait a few minutes before moving on to the next one if the comic seems short.
Runaway, Chapter 14 of Fire
The Rest of the Story: The whole of Fire can be found on my Writings page in PDF format, while the portion of the story that's been published on this blog so far is on this page.

Wondering what happened to Lucia? Well, you're about to find out.


Chapter 14
Runaway


She pushed the ragged blanket lower, trying to cover her overlong legs. That feeble effort only left her exposed elsewhere, and her tossing and turning only made her awkward body more miserable. The steady pattering of the rain nearby reminded her to be grateful for what she did have, a little shelter at the entrance to some Patrician’s townhouse. She considered the damp stone beneath a small enough price for a roof overhead. The household slaves would have chased her off by now if the rain had not made their vigil lax. It drove away other people, too, men with dark thoughts on their minds. She had chosen her shelter with more care since she had awoken to find that hairy man stroking her arm. His gap-toothed smile had vanished when he saw that she was awake, and he had fled as if from a demon. She hoped he was still running.

More than anything, she wanted to go home, but it was the one place she could not go. She did not think she could explain what had happened in a way that would convince anyone. Marjori would never believe such nonsense. Marcus Principius neither tolerated lies from his slaves nor trusted them to tell the truth. As for Avla... if the guards had spoken truly, then Avla wanted Jaelin returned, and as long as the slave girl could still talk, the guards would not be out-of-line if they made her a little more pliable. She thought she must have done something magical in order to escape, as the guards had strangely lost interest in her. They had not noticed when she fled.

Lucia remembered seeing Jaelin die, but somehow she was Jaelin now. When she tried to remember what had happened, she could recall nothing more than her momentary envy of Jaelin’s lost life. Lucia had wanted her anonymity, her life removed from concerns of politics and magic and Domini, her maturity and worldly knowledge, even her exotic beauty. Then, Lucia had changed. Her body had become Jaelin’s, stretching and shifting to be older, stronger, inconveniently taller. She had Jaelin’s features, her freckled face and red hair. Even her voice had changed, though it still didn’t sound like Jaelin’s to her ear. Inside, she was still Lucia.

Unless she really was Jaelin, and her belief that she had once been Lucia was mere fantasy. She shied away from the fearful thought of madness.

The envy seemed silly now. Jaelin was a slave; how could Lucia have forgotten what that meant? Slaves had no rights, and Lucia’s apparent death would fall on her slave girl’s head. Now they were searching for Jaelin, and since Lucia had no idea how to become Lucia again, that meant they were searching for her.

Her stomach growled, reminding her that she had not eaten anything since the apple she had stolen this morning. Even that had been a feast compared to the discarded scraps on which she had survived for the three days previous. She did her best to ignore the hollow pain in her belly, the cold and damp of this evening, and the aches that came from sleeping on hard ground for the last ten nights. She lacked even the single coin to pay for entry to the public baths, and her body itched with the resulting dirt. Drawing herself into a tight ball, she blinked the tears from her eyes and wished for sleep so she could forget these things for a few hours. Her fear of the dreams kept her aware for a long while, however.



Struggling to wake from a dream where she watched her own body, her real body, writhe as fire consumed it, Lucia opened her eyes. For a moment, only dim grey light filled her vision, and heaviness suffused her whole body so she couldn’t move. She opened her mouth to cry out, but only a small whimper came. Fighting, struggling, she managed to get her finger to move, then her hand, then her arm. She pushed herself to a sitting position, her heart racing and her breath coming in short gasps. Real, physical terror had replaced the dream terror of a moment ago. She searched for the source of her distress, and finding none, she realized that her body was behaving normally now. It ached, itched, felt cold and sore, but none of that differed from when she had fallen asleep. The groggy head and blurry vision completed her morning routine. Did what had just happened have something to do with magic? The thought that someone had placed a spell on her frightened her less than the idea that she had done it to herself by wearing someone else’s body. Maybe, no, surely, it had only come from being only half-awake.

Though the rain had stopped, dampness darkened every surface in the dim light of dawn. Lucia shivered in the chill of a morning even colder than the night. The rain had washed out the normal city smells of garbage and food and smoke, of men and animals and their waste, scents she would hardly have noticed had they not been diminished. She saw no one in the narrow street except for a slave boy on some early errand. Although he glanced at her as he jumped over a large puddle, he did not slow, in too much of a hurry to be bothered with the problems of some strange girl.

The unnerving experience of a few moments ago renewed her determination to find her quarry today. It could not be that difficult. Even though she still hesitated to approach him in some public place, Lucia had no intention of losing him again for fear of being caught. She draped the dirty blanket around her shoulders like a shawl as she got unsteadily to her bare feet. They hurt with cuts and bruises which marked her bare feet and legs all the way up to the knees her tunic failed to cover. It might have once fit Lucia perfectly, but it did not fit Jaelin well at all, who was not only taller but also older and more developed. She wished she could have found a tunic that fit better. The blanket shawl at least hid some of the places where it had ripped. For once, she did not want a mirror; she had a good enough idea of what she must look like. Once moving, Jaelin’s long legs carried her faster than Lucia’s would have. It suited her to walk quickly, since her legs didn’t feel as awkward when she hurried, but it exacerbated the pain in her feet and made it even more difficult to avoid the filth and shards which littered the road. Her cut and dirty feet demonstrated how not even the raised stepping stones made the streets of Novaro safe to travel barefoot. She felt exposed, even all alone in the early morning city. Especially when alone. She walked even more rapidly, certain that faster had to be safer.

She did not know where her quarry lived now, since the fire had scattered the entire household. Lucia knew that he had not joined her parents in the Imperial palace, and that he had an apartment somewhere which he had tried to keep secret from her parents. Whether he was now staying there all the time or not, he probably still went there on occasion. Lucia just had to find it. She had followed him the other day, almost to where she thought his apartment must be hidden. Lucia might have approached him publicly if the others hadn’t been following him too. The intentness which had radiated from them had told her that they were not just walking behind him. Though she didn’t know them, they might have recognized Jaelin, so she had kept her distance. Lucia had hoped that she could approach her quarry after his tail had grown tired of the chase, but when he had lost them, he had lost her as well.

Lucia reached the point where he had disappeared last time, then stopped since she had nothing else to go on. No people shared this narrow street with her this morning. She looked around, half-hoping he would appear, and when that failed, she searched for places into which he might have vanished. The whole area had an air of disrepute. Several ungainly tenement buildings supported one another, while a few warehouses clustered near a larger street at the end of the block. None of the buildings were short, and the protruding upper stories threatened to cave in. A fountain splashing tepid water into its basin was the sole public structure around here. Why would he choose this place in which to hide? He had a paranoid need for secrecy, but what could he be doing that would require a place on this street?

Lucia noticed the alley on her third pass across the same stretch of road. What she had taken for a recess between two adjoining tenements was a twisting alleyway, just wide enough for a person to walk through. She stepped inside, feeling like a rabbit going into a ferret’s hole. The alleyway made two sharp turns in quick succession before opening up into a wider stretch flanked by several doors. Lucia sighed in relief when she felt his presence, guiding her unerringly to the third door on her left, which looked no different from any of the others. Raising her hand to knock, she hesitated. He wouldn’t recognize her, likely wouldn’t believe her. What made her think he could help her when no one else could? She was on the verge of turning away when the door opened.

Lucia’s brother looked worse for the wear. Aulus had not bothered to straighten his twisted tunic, and his tousled dark hair and the bags under his eyes did nothing to help his already sickly appearance. Lucia wondered whether he might really be sick. At the sight of her, however, his eyes lit up and unabashed relief filled him. “Finally!” he said. He took hold of her arm and pulled her roughly into the apartment. After a brief look outside to make sure no one lurked in the alley, he shut the door.

Aulus had kept his bedroom at home spotless, everything in its proper place. The clutter of this apartment, while not excessive, did not fit him at all. Scattered papers shared a low-lying table with a single lamp, the only light in this windowless room. A toga draped over the couch, and a lone sandal lay on the open floor. The small stove must provide heat, and perhaps a place to cook. Lucia didn’t see a bed, but the curtained doorway indicated another room. Unless it was much larger than this sparsely-furnished room, the entire apartment could have fit in the atrium of the destroyed townhouse. Aulus didn’t give her much chance to explore. “Where have you been? I expected you days ago.” Rather than continue, he took her firmly in his arms and kissed her.

Alarmed and repulsed, she pushed him away. As his confused eyes met hers, she found herself looking straight into his brown irises rather than up at them as she once had. With the realization of what Aulus saw, Lucia began to understand.

“What’s wrong?” Aulus asked. Her brother and Jaelin? She had thought they didn’t even like one another. How had they managed to keep it from her?

“I’m not Jaelin,” she said.

Aulus just looked at her in confusion.

“I’m not Jaelin,” she repeated. “I’m Lucia.”

“What are you talking about?” Hurt and disbelief coursed through Aulus, barely noticeable beside the rising panic.

“The Dominus came for me. He killed Jaelin, and I... killed him. Then, somehow, I became Jaelin. I don’t know how, or how to change back. I couldn’t go home. Who’d believe me? And Mother is hunting for Jaelin, and the Domini are searching for Lucia, and you’re the only one I--”

“Hush,” Aulus said, hugging her gently. Lucia could sense real compassion in the midst of all the grief and fear, but it all gave way to the hard edge of his skepticism.

“You don’t believe me, do you?” she said into his ear.

Aulus pushed her back, his hands on her shoulders. His face had turned hard and unreadable; his mind had vanished entirely. Unlike the Dominus’s blank wall, which she could feel even when she could not read what it hid, this seemed more like Aulus wasn’t there at all, even though she could still see and hear and touch him. “How can I believe you? You look like Jaelin, you feel like her.” He pinched her arm, though not hard. “You even sound like her. But you’re not acting like Jaelin.” He frowned. “You could be lying, but I think you believe what you’re saying. That doesn’t make it true, though.”

“You think I’m Jaelin and I’ve gone mad.”

“Whoever you are, you’ve been through a terrifying experience, and you’re coping with it as well as you can.” He looked her up and down. “That’s the most reasonable explanation I can think of. As for what you believe happened--I don’t even know whether or not it’s possible. I can’t rule it out entirely.”

“You’re hoping I am Jaelin, aren’t you? You’d rather have her than me.”

For a moment, she could sense him again, grief and fear, hope and desire, and underneath it all a bitter amusement that was distinctly Aulus. All of it vanished in a moment. “I hope? What is there to hope? Either I lose a sister or a... friend. I had reconciled myself to losing Lucia, but Jaelin had vanished too and I was afraid I had lost her--you--as well. Now you’re telling me I had it backwards. Do you expect me to be happy? Madness or magic, which should I prefer?”

Lucia had not allowed herself to dwell on Jaelin’s death. She had avoided any thought of those awful moments of magic, fire, and death, though they came to haunt her dreams anyway. For the first time, the raw truths of what had happened caught up to her. Jaelin was gone. Her constant companion for most of her life had died because of her. Shuddering, heaving cries seized her. Aulus placed his arm around her awkwardly and led her to the couch, where he sat her down. He took a position on the disorderly table across from her and waited for her noisy sobs to subside. It took a long time, as memories of Jaelin flitted through her mind: The red-haired girl comforting her as she cried over some trifle. Jaelin’s panic when she had touched the fire. The two of them with their heads together, foreheads almost touching, conspiring to slip out of the house before Marjori could find them. Jaelin had often counseled caution, but when Lucia had insisted on doing something reckless, she had always come up with the how. Lucia would have to figure out the how for herself now. When she looked up, sniffling and wiping tears from her eyes, she found Aulus watching her. She thought she had seen him wipe his eyes earlier, but now he just watched her with a quizzical expression. “You don’t cry like Jaelin,” he said. “She rarely cries, and when she does, she fights the tears every moment.”

“You still don’t believe me, though.”

“No, I don’t,” Aulus said. “Although...” He shook his head. “We need to talk about what we should do.”

“What about it?”

“First, you should put on some decent clothes. There are some in the bedroom. You could use a bath, too, but that’ll have to wait. Why don’t you get changed?” The thought of changing out of the rags she wore now had never seemed more appealing. She hurried to the bedroom while Aulus stoked the stove.

The bedroom had the same dishevelled appearance as the rest of the apartment and Aulus himself. Bed coverings lay in a heap on the floor, leaving the scandalous bed, large enough for two people, bare. A few of Aulus’s clothes lay scattered about as well. A shuttered window probably looked out on a courtyard. She didn’t open the shutters, instead going to the cabinet against the wall. Inside, a partition divided it into two sides, one occupied by Aulus’s clothes and the other by a woman’s clothing. Stripping off her torn and dirty tunic, she put on the best of what lay in the cabinet. She had forgotten what clean, comfortable clothing felt like. The perfect fit seemed odd after wearing the undersized tunic for days. She could tell that these clothes must belong to her slave girl, and any doubts she still had about the relationship between Jaelin and Aulus vanished. Lucia shuddered to think what her father would think of it.

She fingered the fabric of the dress she had put on. Something seemed odd about it. While not as fine as what she had worn as an Imperial princess, she didn’t think it’s low quality was what bothered her. Without a mirror, she couldn’t see what she looked like, so she tried to picture herself in it. No, to picture Jaelin wearing this dress. Lucia realized the she had never seen her slave girl wear anything like this. Jaelin had more often than not worn a simple grey tunic, shorter than her mistress’s. Aside from being full length, this dress had a light blue color. No slave wore dyed clothing. What had Jaelin and Aulus been up to? Lucia longed to hear Jaelin’s explanation. Wiping her suddenly blurry eyes, she wondered whether she could ask Aulus. Would he give her an honest answer? Could she tell if he didn’t?

Lucia returned to the other room, more comfortable in body if less so in mind. Aside from straightening up some, Aulus had also heated water and laid out some food. He gave Lucia a warm, damp cloth. She accepted it gratefully and tried to wipe her hands and face clean, watching in alarm as the cloth went from white to gray. “At least now it’s dirtier than you are,” Aulus said, giving his usual smile at another’s embarrassment. Discarding the cloth, she tentatively began to eat the food in front of her. Bread, cheese, and fruit made up a typical Novar lunch, along with a cup of almost cool water. She sat down on the couch and began to eat, focusing on the fruit since she had found that bread and cheese upset her stomach if she had not eaten in a while.

“What now?” she mumbled to Aulus around an apple.

Aulus stood above her, watching her eat. She still could not sense him. “I had intended to take you with me. You—Jaelin—and I discussed this,” he said. “At length.” He had apparently convinced himself that she was Jaelin.

“With you? Where?” Jaelin had intended to leave? Why hadn’t she told her mistress? The hurt Lucia felt engendered guilt. How could she take offense at something her dead friend had done?

“If you can’t remember, I probably shouldn’t tell you. You might say something to someone you shouldn’t. After what’s happened, I can’t bring you with me anyway.” He paused, waiting for her to say something. Lucia was afraid to ask why she couldn’t go with him. She didn’t want to go with Aulus, not when he still believed that she was Jaelin. Would his doubt stop him from...? She pushed the thought from her mind while Aulus answered the unasked question. “The people who would have helped me to hide you before won’t now that Mother is hunting for you. They’d just hand you over to her. I think I can get you out of Novaro, but you can’t come with me.”

Lucia took a drink of water so she could speak. “Well, what about Grandad? I thought maybe I could stay with him. It’s a long way from Novaro, but that’s a good thing. It’s out of the way, so I don’t think the Domini or anyone else who’d be looking for me go there very often. And if anyone can face down a Dominus, it’s him.”

She still couldn’t sense Aulus, but she knew she had said something right when he smiled and said, “That’s brilliant! Mother would never think to look for you there.”

“Mom...” She had a sinking feeling. How could she forget that her grandfather would mistake her for Jaelin just like everyone else? “Grandad would tell her he had me, wouldn’t he?”

“No, no, no. He dotes on you, remember?” At Lucia’s confused look, he slowed down to explain. “Your parents belonged to him before they died in the Agnatius Rebellion. He raised you himself. We stayed with you and Grandfather for a year when you were six and I was seven. Lucia must have been two or three. You two took an instant liking to one another... You really don’t remember this?”

Of course she didn’t remember what had happened to her at that age. As far as Lucia could remember, Jaelin had always been there. Now that she thought about it, her grandfather had always welcomed Jaelin as warmly as Lucia when they visited. The two also spent considerable time alone together. They hadn’t visited him often, but Lucia should have paid more attention to Jaelin’s relationship to him. Only, why would anyone want to know about a slave’s life?

“Why did Jaelin leave?” Lucia asked.

Aulus looked at her for a moment, before saying, “You and Lucia both begged him not to separate you. He let you go with her, but he still owns you. You’ve told me before that he intends to free you when you’re twenty.” Aulus frowned. “I never understood why he let you leave, or why you wanted to go. You were both happier before. It always struck me as one of Lucia’s whims, when everyone went along for no sensible reason...” Aulus trailed off at her expression. “Sorry, I forgot.”

The words gave Lucia something to think about. She didn’t want to admit that Aulus was right, but Lucia realized now that she had almost always gotten her way. She had believed that her abilities were new, but maybe instead she had just become aware of what she had always done. With that realization came a depressing thought. When people were kind and accommodating to her, did they do it because they liked her or because she made them? Did people really like her at all, or had she somehow coerced them into acting as if they did? Even Aulus would hesitate to manipulate people the way she did without thinking.

Her brother didn’t seem to notice the sudden attack of self-doubt. “Would you like to visit the baths? I’d hate to say that you need one, but...” He gave another of his mocking smiles. “We can go to the small one close-by. While the regulars might remember us, none of them know who we really are.”

“Yeah,” Lucia said, her mind on more disturbing things. “That would be nice.”

The public bath turned out to be the more disturbing thing after all. Aulus hadn’t told her about the mixed bathing.



Over the next few days, Lucia actually missed living on the streets. The food, clean clothing, and warm bed did not make life with Aulus tolerable. He did not approach her, or even talk about his and Jaelin’s previous relationship, but when she could sense him she knew that what he felt for her was not brotherly affection. He had convinced himself that she was Jaelin, and nothing that Lucia said could change his mind. Only his knowledge of her “madness” stopped him from pressing her. Fortunately, Aulus spent much of the day elsewhere, working and, she believed, plotting. She pretended to sleep when he came home late.

Just hiding in the apartment from the Domini, the guards, and anyone else who might be looking for her quickly lost its appeal. It would have helped if Lucia had anywhere to go. She did not want to wander around in this sort of neighborhood, even to visit the small forum a few streets over. Without any money, she couldn’t do a great deal of shopping anyway. Aside from that small marketplace, only tenements and warehouses stood nearby. And the bath.

That place both appalled and fascinated her. She imagined what her mother would say about Lucia bathing with both men and women. Avla had a most unNovar dislike of public baths in general; she herself only bathed in the private bath which Lucia’s father had commissioned for her. At first, Lucia too had been mortified at the idea of mixed bathing. Gradually, the casualness of the nudity had caused her to relax. It was not the orgy some of the rumors made it out to be. Mostly, the customers came from the poorer citizenry, and they had larger concerns than shared bathing facilities. The stern proprietess forbade any physical contact between the sexes, and bouncers stood ready to enforce that rule. Lucia found it curious that the men felt more self-conscious than the women, though they hid it behind forced nonchalance. The baths offered scant refuge, however. Even though she started to recognize some of the regulars, she couldn’t carry on more than the most trivial conversation. Between her own embarrassment and her awareness of their self-consciousness, Lucia couldn’t manage to talk to the men at all. She took to going to the baths early in the day, when mostly women filled the various pools.

With no one to talk to and nothing to do, she spent much of her time alone with her thoughts. Lucia would have much preferred either to distract herself from these difficult ruminations or to talk with someone about them, but she had neither option available. She may not have had anyone with whom she could speak when she lived out in the streets, but at least she had something to do, namely surviving. Now she could only think. Jaelin’s death, the Domini, her abilities and her unconscious use of them, the relationship between her brother and her slave, Aulus’s conviction that she really was Jaelin, her mother’s hunt for the young slave girl, her grandfather’s connection to Jaelin--all these things haunted her thoughts. She spent many hours letting them chase each other around in her head until it ached. Then, exhausted, she’d lie down and sleep, only to awake in the night, the thoughts still there. Lucia spent a great deal of time sleeping, hoping to escape them, but usually they came back in her dreams.

Dreams of fire came the most often, the flames always hungry for someone. The Dominus, her father, her mother, Aulus--they all cried out in agony from within. When she saw a tall, red-haired girl in them, she didn’t know whether it was Jaelin or herself. Sometimes the blaze consumed Victor. His suffering was worse than all the others combined. He didn’t cry out, instead looking at her with pity and hurt. Lucia woke from that dream more quickly than any of the others, only to find that the memory of it faded more slowly.

When Aulus announced that he had come up with a way for her to slip out of the city, she couldn’t leave soon enough. She didn’t have to wait long, since his arrangements required her to flee that night. After a flurry of packing, she found herself wandering through dark and empty streets with Aulus drawing her almost at a run. Like Aulus, Lucia wore a dark cloak with the hood drawn up, sure to draw suspicion had anyone seen them, but her brother proved adept at avoiding notice. They hid in the doorway to a large townhouse as two watchmen passed within a few feet without spotting them. Then they were off again, through narrow streets and even narrower alleyways, following a winding route that covered twice the distance as a straight line. It took nearly an hour to reach a point near the city walls.

The sky had begun to lighten to the dull grey of false dawn. A sputtering street lamp provided enough real light for a fat merchant to hitch his wagon to two reluctant donkeys. He must have lit it himself, as no other lamps showed signs of life. The merchant smacked one donkey on the nose when it tried to bite him, muttering either to it or to himself.

“Raxtus!” Aulus hissed from the alleyway by which they had approached. He tossed his hood back to let the dim light fall on his face. The man spun around, his hand clamped around a short sword he had at his waist. Lucia couldn’t imagine a man that large being able to use one effectively. What sort of merchant wore a sword, anyway? His eyes looked much too small in that wide face, although his large nose fit it well.

“Oh, it’s you,” he grunted. He didn’t sound happy to see Aulus.

Aulus replied, “Be glad it’s me and not the guards. Besides, did you think you’d be able to leave without my help?”

“I thought I might give it a try,” he said, drawing closer. His worn traveling cloak draped over a stained tunic.

“You wouldn’t make it.” A slight smile touched Aulus’s lips. “You’re kind of hard to miss, you know.”

“Not all the guards can have a description of me, no matter how remarkable I look.”

“I was thinking more along the lines of remarkably large, but...” Her brother radiated confidence, enough that he could risk insulting the man like this. “All the captains have your description, and no junior guard would let you leave this early without waking his captain.” Lucia realized Aulus was enjoying manipulating this fat merchant, certain that he had full control of the situation. Fortunately, Aulus judged correctly. For all his bluster, the man reeked of resignation. Lucia wished that were all he reeked of. Sweat and sour wine made a poor perfume.

“If getting out is so hard, how do you intend to get me past the guard?”

“I’ll go with you to the Septimian Gate. I know the officer on duty there tonight, and he’ll let you through.”

“And they’ll stop hunting for me? You promised me that.”

“Tomorrow, the paperwork to renew your case will get lost. When descriptions get circulated next month, yours won’t be among them. I would wait another few months before coming into Novaro again, but after that...”

The man grinned, showing more holes than teeth. Lucia wondered whether he could even eat solid food. “Well, if you’re offering me that, I suppose it’s worth the price, boy.” He looked at Lucia for the first time, trying to see into her hood. “I suppose this is the cargo.”

“This is your passenger. Her name is Marcia, and that’s all you need to know.”

“What story should I tell? My young wife?”

“Say she’s your daughter. I expect you to treat her that way--if she doesn’t get word to me that she’s safely reached her destination within two and a half months, I’ll track you down again.”

“Can’t you trust me not to harm the young woman? You know I’m no highway bandit. Besides, you’re not giving me much time to get her there so she can send a message back.” As odd as it seemed, Lucia sensed the sincerity of his words.

“No, not a bandit, just a smuggler. Take good care of her.”

Raxtus retuned to the donkeys, who seemed none too happy for the attention. For a moment, Lucia thought she could sense what the animals felt, but she had other things on her mind. “You’re sending me with him?” she whispered to Aulus.

“Raxtus is harmless,” he assured her. “A small time smuggler who ran afoul of one of the Agnatii. Since he’s so concerned with someone spotting him, he’ll do his best to keep both of you away from places where you might run into trouble.”

“Or he might sacrifice me to save himself!” Lucia said. She didn’t really believe it, though. Smuggler caught in a tight place he might be, but she couldn’t read any betrayal or deceit in him.

“Sacrificing you will only bring something worse, and he knows it. I would make his life a waking nightmare,” Aulus said as if such words were comforting. How could he be so skeptical of everyone else, yet so confident in his own wild plans? Before she could stop him, he leaned close to give her a kiss on the cheek. “Let’s go,” he said, pulling her to the wagon. Lucia’s free hand twitched. If he had tried to kiss her lips, she would have slapped him.

The first part of Aulus’s plan worked without a hitch, and by dawn she and Raxtus had travelled a mile past the Septimian gate. The smuggler watched her out of the corner of his eye but remained silent. While she could feel his matter-of-fact lust, at least he thought her off limits. Lucia just hoped that her life was improving since the day she found Aulus. She feared that it was getting worse.


This chapter is a 5,559 word excerpt of a 90,110 word novel.

One thing that surprised me was Jaelin's and Aulus's relationship. It hadn't occured to me they might be lovers until after I killed her off. Once I found that out, I began to wish she was still around so I could develop that further. Alas, that was not to be, and I had to live with the consequences of my actions.

Friday, December 30, 2005

New Orleans Katrina Aftermath
While in Louisiana this week, I took the opportunity to visit New Orleans on Monday. I couldn't go to the Ninth Ward, as that's closed to the public, but I did see some other places hit by the hurricane. There's evidence of damage everywhere, as you can see in this picture, where a street lamp is completely bent over--probably by the hurricane winds:


The neighborhood we visited was Lakeview, which was a pretty nice part of town. Now it's mostly rubble. Literally. People are throwing away all the stuff that was damaged in the flood, piling it in front of their houses.


Yes, that is an old military uniform--Marines, I think--in that pile. Many of the houses are completely gutted: windows, doors, furniture, carpet, even parts of the walls gone. On the outside of the houses you can see lines, marking the levels of flooding they experienced:


Still, there are signs of life, people going through their remaining possessions, signs telling people they're back. I saw several churches declaring that they were having services. Some houses even had Christmas decorations up.

Despite that, there was a lot of property damage done. Cars which didn't make it out are all over the place.


As are boats.


The worst I saw was this building here. I'm not sure what it is or where it's supposed to be, but I'm pretty sure it's not supposed to be like that.



Maybe tomorrow I'll put up what I have from the French Quarter, which avoided the worst of the damage.

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Character Archetypes
Yesterday, I said that I couldn't get into Battlestar Galactica because I didn't care for the characters. That got me to thinking about what kind of characters I like and don't like. That's not an easy question to answer. A lot depends on how the character is written, what his personality is, and how he shows his mettle by his deeds, so that it can't be easily translated into certain types. That said, there are some archetypes which appeal to me, and I have an easier time getting attached to them, so I'll talk a bit about them. As they're archetypes, I'll just use the masculine pronoun, but most of these archetypes work just as well for male and female characters. Also, as these are generic character types, it is possible, in fact common, for characters to fall under more than one archetype during the course of their role in a story, sometimes more than one at a time.

Character archetypes I like

The Good Guys

The Rogue Hero — My favorite, probably. This person usually has a criminal or mercenary past, but he always has a rebellious streak, a low regard for the rules, and a cynical attitude. He has, nevertheless, joined the right side, usually because he finds that he cares for the people, rather than because of the cause.

The Defector — Originally on the wrong side, his reasons for changing allegiances can vary from true repentance to a desire for revenge against his former employer. He brings with him a dark and suspicious attitude as well as an intricate knowledge of the enemy's inner workings.

The Underdog — Apparently weaker and less intelligent than his enemies and his protectors, he proves to have hidden reserves of strength. In fantasy, this often involves magical power or hidden ancestry, but I think this character type works best if it is "merely" strength of character and an innate goodness.

The Bad Guys

The Honorable Antagonist — Not really a bad guy, the honorable antagonist generally believes he is doing the right thing. Even if he knows his side is in the wrong, he believes that the higher calling of loyalty or honor requires him to continue down his path, even though it puts him at odds with the good guys. Because of his high principles, he can be won over.

The Mastermind — This type is truly evil, but more importantly, he is truly brilliant. A master manipulator, he is always one step ahead of the heroes, often using their supposed successes to further his own goals. He occasionally makes mistakes, but he is quick to learn and recover from them.

Others

The Outsider — He does what he does for his own purposes, and in order to do so, he'll make common cause with either the good guys or the bad guys. But because he does not share their allegiance, he's likely to turn against either if it's to his advantage.

The Conflicted — This type finds himself torn between two paths, with conflicting desires and circumstances driving him. Unlike the outsider, he does serve a side, but he finds himself drawn to the other.



Character archetypes I don't like

The Good Guys

The Superhero — It's reasonable, even expected, for the hero to be a little bit stronger, a little bit faster, and a little bit smarter than average... that's how he survives long enough to be the hero. However, when the hero is so overpowering in his abilities that he dwarfs mortal men and tramples over the common opponents, the only way to challenge him is to create stronger and stronger enemies for him until the story becomes a contest of gods.

The Bumbler — Often nothing more than comic relief, the bumbler is a sidekick who never accomplishes anything on his own. He is often in the company of a superhero, who will constantly need to rescue him. Occasionally a bumbler will turn out to be an underdog in disguise, but often not.

The Questgiver — This is a very old archetype, the wise old man or woman who explains to the hero what he must do, he often acts as a guardian to the hero early on. Of course, if he's so wise and powerful, shouldn't he be performing his own darn quest? He's always removed by a convenient plot twist in the fourth act.

The Bad Guys

The Incompetent — Less intelligent than he believes, often cowardly, this bad guy is never as much of a threat as he seems.

The Traitor — One can change sides for honorable reasons, but to change sides out of greed or cowardice is merely patheric.

Others

The Victim — The victim never accomplishes anything. Instead, it just happens to him. Those who face adversity and grow stronger can achieve much, but those who merely suffer are simply boring.



Now, those are my general thoughts. I'm not saying that a story shouldn't have any of the archetypes I don't like--sometimes they play important roles in the story. I'm just saying that I find it hard to get attached to those types of characters. Of course, a particularly well written character of a type I don't usually like can grow on me, and I can lose interest in a character of a type I do like if his personality just doesn't sit right with me.

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Thursday, December 29, 2005

Christmas 2005 Pictures I
Here are a couple of pictures I took this Christmas when I visited my family in Louisiana.

That's the Christmas tree at my parents' place. Yes, it is crooked. In fact, I think I'm holding the camera at an angle so it looks straighter than it actually is.

That's my niece, Kara, the daughter of my sister Rebekah. She's two, and much neater than her mother, as you can tell by the fact that she's playing with a toy mop.

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Battlestar Galactica
All sorts of people are singing the praises of Sci-Fi's new Battlestar Galactica series these days, not just Dean Esmay and Jonah Goldberg, but also James Poniewozik in Time. I'm probably going to lose my Sci-Fi credentials for this, but I never really got into the show. I watched the pilot miniseries and the whole first season, and while I agreed that the plot was wonderfully convoluted, the politics intriguing, and the philosophical and theological implications fascinating, that isn't enough for me. I'll read a book or watch a movie on the promise of a strong premise, but if you want me to commit to an entire series of books or television episodes, then I need to love the characters. And on that level, this new Battlestar Galactica never worked for me. A few of the characters were likeable, more were tolerable, and all of them were intriguing, but I couldn't get attached to any of them. I couldn't care about them. Perhaps their personalities just grated on mine. Perhaps the writers' efforts to make them flawed made them too flawed for me to like them. Perhaps there's no real reason at all. In the end, I lost interest in the show, and I'm no longer watching it.

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Wednesday, December 28, 2005

Now accepting submissions to Storyblogging Carnival XXXV
The Storyblogging Carnival is an opportunity for bloggers to share examples of storytelling in blog format, whether they are fiction posted online or something else. The next Storyblogging Carnival will be the thirty-fifth, and it will be going up January 2nd on Josh Fielek's blog, Quibbles-n-Bits.

If you'd like to participate, please e-mail your story submissions to Josh at jfielek-at-cox.net, including the following information:
  • Name of your blog
  • URL of your blog
  • Title of the story
  • URL for the blog entry where the story is posted
  • (OPTIONAL) Author's name
  • (OPTIONAL) A suggested rating for adult content (G, PG, PG-13, R)
  • A word count
  • A short blurb describing the story

The post may be of any age, from a week old to years old. The submission deadline is the end of the year, or 11:59 PM Eastern time on Saturday, December 31st. Actually, I think Josh's deadline is 6 pm on Sunday, but the end of the year just sounds much cooler.
I'm back!
I arrived home last night, but didn't have much of a chance to prepare many posts. I'll post more tomorrow, including some pictures from my trip.

Tuesday, December 27, 2005

Travelling today
I'm heading back to Boston today, so I'm going to be offline all day. I'll check back in once I'm home.

Monday, December 26, 2005

Weekly Webcomic Update
Sluggy Freelance — Pete leaves Bun-bun where he is for a while and gives us a flashback to 2002 where Torg and Riff try to earn money for Christmas presents by becoming Holiday Ninjas™.

Day by Day — Maverick Mime Lieberman gets the spotlight at first, then its on to Christmas gift giving humor with the main cast, with a brief break to make fun of Reid.

Scary Go Round — Shelley and Amy go out for drinks with Ryan for Christmas, bringing Amy's Dad with them. Shelley, being the naturally cheery person she is, is enjoying herself, while Amy's being blasphemous. The Boy is ambushed with a snowball by Esther and Erin.

College Roomies from Hell!!! — While Maritza's on break, she's been running the winners from her fanstuff contest.

General Protection Fault — With evil Trish gone, Nick and Ki go to their respective pre-wedding parties, then Ki shows up to visit Nick just before the wedding for some cybersex using the Mutex. He doesn't catch on that it's an alternate universe version of Ki until it's too late.

Schlock Mercenary — A lone freighter captain has the guts to take out Petey's frigate right after it destroys the Assembly, and Petey awards the captain by making him the Principal.

Sunday, December 25, 2005

Merry Christmas!
God bless y'all! I'm celebrating the holiday, but I'll be back tomorrow for more of my Irregular Holiday Blogging™.

Saturday, December 24, 2005

Finished!
Well, I spent hours writing instead of visiting with my family this Christmas vacation, but I finally finished the first draft of the sequel to Fire, tentatively titled Water. As I say every time I mention this story, "sequel" is probably the wrong word, since Fire and Water are actually two parts of a single book. My biggest concern with Water is that I focused too much time on a single story thread and let the other threads and their associated characters languish. I hope that in the revising I'll be able to trim the main thread, which is probably too wordy, and maybe expand upon the other threads. In any case, that will wait, as I don't plan to revise Water, or even look at it, for a couple of months. For now, I'll simply enjoy the fact that I'm finally done!

Oh, and maybe I'll find some time to enjoy Christmas as well.

Thursday, December 22, 2005

Executing traitors
A number of bloggers have been asserting that the leaks to the press about the NSA program to monitor communications between terrorists outside and inside of the US amounts to treason. It is indeed illegal to leak classified information, but bloggers, such as Dean Esmay and Doc Rampage, are saying that execution is an appropriate punishment.

It is rare that people are executed for spying in the US, even when they are selling classified information to our enemy. See, for example, this list from CNN. A few examples:
  • 1984 — Richard William Miller

    Miller was a Los Angeles-based FBI agent who was arrested for passing classified documents to two pro-Soviet immigrants, who also were arrested and pleaded guilty to conspiracy. Miller pleaded innocent, saying he was trying to infiltrate the KGB. His first trial ended in a mistrial, but he was found guilty in second trial in 1986. That verdict was overturned in 1989 on a technicality. In a third trial, he was convicted again and sentenced to 20 years in 1991. He was released in 1994 after a federal judge reduced his sentence.


  • 1985 — Jonathan Jay Pollard

    A civilian employee at the Naval Investigative Service, Pollard was arrested for selling classified information to Israeli intelligence. Convicted of espionage on June 4, 1986, he was sentenced to life in prison in 1987. His wife, Anne Louise Henderson Pollard, was also convicted of espionage and received a five-year prison term. Israel, which granted Pollard citizenship, has lobbied former Presidents George Bush and Bill Clinton to pardon Pollard. Clinton considered doing so in the midst of the Wye River peace talks between Israel and the Palestinians in 1998. Clinton pulled back after CIA Director George Tenet threatened to resign if Pollard was pardoned.


  • 1985 — Walker family

    John A. Walker Jr. was a retired Navy warrant officer charged with selling information to the Soviets for 18 years, including data on U.S. encryption devices that compromised U.S. communications. Once out of the Navy, Walker recruited his son, Michael Walker, a petty officer aboard the USS Nimitz; his brother, ex-Navy Lt. Cmdr. Arthur James Walker; and Jerry Alfred Whitworth, a retired Navy communications specialist, to procure classified documents that the elder Walker paid for and then sold to the Soviets. John Walker's ex-wife tipped the FBI to his activities, and he was arrested in May 1985. The three others were apprehended around the same time.

    In late 1985, John Walker Jr. pleaded guilty to espionage charges as part of a plea agreement to testify at Whitworth's trial and provide full details on what he gave to the Soviets in exchange for a lesser sentence for his son. The elder Walker was sentenced to two life terms plus 10 years, and his son, who also pleaded guilty, was sentenced to 25 years. Arthur James Walker was convicted of seven counts of espionage in late 1985 and was sentenced to life in prison. Whitworth was convicted of espionage and tax charges in 1986 and sentenced to 365 years.


  • 1994 — Aldrich Ames

    Ames was characterized as probably the most damaging turncoat in U.S. history. A career agency official, Ames began selling U.S. secrets to the KGB in 1985, when he was head of the CIA's Soviet counterintelligence unit. Within a decade he had revealed more than 100 covert operations and betrayed at least 30 agents. Ten of the spies revealed by Ames were later executed by the Soviets, including Dmitri Polyakov, the top CIA informer inside Soviet military intelligence. Ames' activities also may have allowed the Soviets to dupe the CIA by sending fake intelligence to the agency through the agents whom Ames compromised.

    Along with his co-conspirator and wife, Rosario, Ames was paid more than $2.7 million for the information before he was arrested in 1994. He was convicted and sentenced to life in prison without parole, while his wife, under the terms of a plea agreement, pleaded guilty and was sentenced to five years and three months in prison for conspiring to commit espionage and evading taxes.


  • 1997 — Squillacote, Stand and Clark

    Theresa Marie Squillacote, husband Kurt Alan Stand and friend James Michael Clark were college buddies who spied on behalf of East Germany. Prosecutors said Stand began his spying activities in 1972 when East Germany recruited him to line up spies in Washington. Stand enlisted Clark in 1976 while the two were members of a radical leftist group at the University of Wisconsin and recruited his wife about the time the couple married in 1980. Stand was a labor union official, while Squillacote was a lawyer who later worked as the senior staff attorney in the office of the deputy undersecretary of defense. Clark was a civilian analyst for the Army.

    U.S. authorities learned of the past activities of the spy ring from German files following the collapse of the communist East Berlin government. A U.S. agent contacted Squillacote in 1997 claiming to be a South African official and Communist Party member. She then produced secret Pentagon documents describing arms transactions and assessing U.S. troop strength and one document about U.S. nuclear weapons.

    All three were arrested in October 1997. Clark pleaded guilty in June 1998 to conspiracy to commit espionage and received a reduced sentence of 12 years and seven months in prison in exchange for testifying against Squillacote and Stand. The couple were convicted in 1998 of conspiracy and espionage charges, and Squillacote received 21 years in prison and her husband 17 years.

Given these examples, and the seriousness of the crimes committed by these traitors, execution for leaking damaging information to the New York Times is disproportionate. The leakers are undoubtedly guilty of a crime, but I think twenty years to life is a more appropriate sentence.

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Wednesday, December 21, 2005

Domestic spying
Every time I hear about the outrageous expansion of surveillance powers under the current administration, I end up thinking the same thing, "Wait a minute! You mean our intelligence services weren't doing that before 9/11? What the heck did we even have them for?" That, ultimately, is why the Democrats won't make any headway in this line of attack. I, and most Americans, grew up on a steady diet of spy thrillers, both in novels and movies. In them, the all-powerful CIA, NSA, or even intelligence organizations whom the government didn't publicly acknowledge the existence of, ran all sorts of crazy operations in order to protect US citizens. In their desperate efforts to counter the terrorists, torture, warrantless searches, and assassinations were the norm. In the context of killing the enemy before he could set off a nuclear device in New York City, all this was considered justified. And if occasional mistakes were made and the wrong person died, or if laws were broken, that was acceptable collateral damage in this shadowy war. True, this attitude towards the intelligence services made us feel a little bit paranoid about big brother, but ultimately we felt better for the knowledge that such powerful organizations were out there, protecting us from the terrorists.

Of course, it turns out that the real organizations aren't anywhwere near as powerful or effective as we had been led to believe. And when we hear this outcry over them listening in on conversations between terrorists outside and inside of America, what bothers us most is not that they were doing it without a warrant after 9/11--we didn't even know that they needed a warrant for that--but that they apparently weren't doing it at all before.

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Tuesday, December 20, 2005

I made it safely to Louisiana...
My luggage didn't. I still don't know where it is or when I'll get it. When I told my niece about my problems, she thought it was funny, at least until I told her that her present was in the lost bag. I'm kind of annoyed at Delta, as they weren't all that helpful in dealing with the problem. They won't offer any remuneration until it's at least 24 hours late, and then it's only $25 a day. Whatever happened to trying to assuage the customer?
Traveling today
I'm traveling to Louisiana to see my family for Christmas today, so I probably won't be blogging. I won't be completely out of touch for the week I'm there, but don't expect me to be prolific.

Monday, December 19, 2005

Storyblogging Carnival XXXIV
Welcome to the latest Storyblogging Carnival, a collection of storytelling in blog format from around the blogosphere. This week we have nine stories from familiar writers. Some of these stories have a Christmas theme, while some don't, but I hope you'll enjoy them all.


Thag do art!
by Mark Rayner of The Skwib
A 220 word brief story rated PG-13.

The continuing adventures of Thag; this story examines the nature of artists.

[I like Thag, even if he is an artist. -DSC]


Rising Up
by Goemagog of this space for sublet
A 599 word brief story rated G.

Balloons! Monkey free.

[A story by Goemagog without monkeys? That's rare. -DSC]


Ink Magic (Part 6) (Beginning)
by Dave Gudeman of Doc Rampage
The latest 1,048 words of a 13,336 word short story rated PG.

Steven goes back to have a chat with the old guy that sic'ed the demon on him in the first place. Secrets are revealed. Plots thicken.

[I finally got a chance to get caught up on Doc's story, which I'd kind of fallen behind on since the last time I hosted. It's good, but I'm sure Doc will understand if I notice some small similarity between it and my story. -DSC]


Father of Mine
by J. Fielek of Quibbles-n-Bits
A 1,800 word short story rated PG.

Sometimes you never know what you left behind.

[A Christmas story, of sorts. Nice, but not without sexual themes. -DSC]


The Forgotten, Part Four (Beginning)
by Andrea Graham of Adam's Blog
The latest 2,710 words of a continuing short story rated PG.

Blinded while protecting his flocks from a lion, Josiah Bar Natan is forced to seek refuge with his Uncle Benjamin in Jerusalem during the days of Christ's ministry. His uncle's servant girl, Rachel, is assigned the daunting duty of convincing a proud Josiah to accept her help and his condition, as Josiah has vowed to fast and pray until the Lord restores his sight.

[Another story I just recently got caught up on, and I'm glad it did. I particularly like the character of Rachel. -DSC]


Aftermath, Chapter 13 of Fire (The Whole Thing)
by Donald S. Crankshaw of Back of the Envelope
An 3,943 word excerpt of a 90,110 word novel.

It is the aftermath of the Battle of the South Kainin Pass, and Gar and Talnek are arguing.


Part 3, Chapters 8 and 9 of The Child (Beginning)
by Sheya Joie of Tales by Sheya
The latest 4,998 words of a 104,743 word novel in progress rated PG.

Solitary is not so solitary when you aren't alone. And Forest and James get their encounter with Logan, king of the fighters.

[Okay, I'll admit that I still haven't quite caught up to the most recent chapter of The Child. Sheya just writes too fast! -DSC]


Chapters 17 and 18 of Britannia Revived (The Whole Story)
by Andrew Ian Dodge of Dodgeblogium
The next 6,720 word of a continuing story rated R.

The story of an EU dystopia continues.


Faded Glory
by Josh Cohen of The New D-42
An 11,000 word short story rated NC-17.

The story of a guy who goes to his high school reunion, intercut with stuff from his past.

[This is a part of Josh's Little Infidelities series, about people who almost, but not quite, ruin their relationships. This is one of those where it seems like the infidelity isn't so little. -DSC]


If you'd like to take part in a future carnival, please contact me. I am also looking for hosts. Other carnivals can be found here.

The Storyblogging Carnival can be found at The Truth Laid Bear's ÜberCarnival.
Weekly Webcomic Update
Sluggy Freelance — A quick explanation of Bun-bun's troubles with Blacksoul and his other firstmates culminates with Murdock letting slip that Bun-bun's found Teknokon One.

Day by Day — Sam is having some trouble with telephone solicitors who know too much--maybe she should have a chat with Bun-bun, once he escapes timeless space. Meanwhile, Democratic incoherence on Iraq contines to be a major theme, exacerbated by the recent vote.

Scary Go Round — After showing Chester Jones their pictures of the witch, Ryan and Amy split the 10,000 pound prize. Meanwhile, Shelley's been dating Chester.

College Roomies from Hell!!! — After whatever deal Mike made with Dover, he's pretty depressed. The rest of the Roomies are ecstatic, though. Now that the storyline's ended, Maritza's taking a break from the comic until the new year.

General Protection Fault — Nick and company finally catch on to Trish's evil doings, and she vanishes right in front of their eyes, returning to her own world, where an evil version of Nick has his own Mutex. The interesting thing, which I hadn't noticed before, is that this is the start of another major, year-long storyline, along the lines of Surreptitious Machinations. I look forward to how this develops.

Schlock Mercenary — Petey commits an act of aggression, destroying a world's government in order to take over, using some legalistic reasoning to justify it. Whatever he says, I call it murder, which is yet more evidence that the superconsciousness is becoming a danger to everyone.

Sunday, December 18, 2005

Pessimist sayings
Responding to my earlier pessimist saying, Doc adds one of his own: "The optimist dies a thousand deaths, the pessimist only one. And he saw that one coming." I think he's just trying to be funny.

Remember the original saying that I quoted? "I would rather be an optimist and be wrong than a pessimist who proves to be right. The former sometimes wins, but never the latter." I think that's just plain untrue. A quick rewrite gives: "I would rather be a pessimist who proves to be wrong than an optimist and be wrong. The former really wins, but not the latter." Contrary to popular beliefs, pessimists do like to be wrong. Pleasant surprises are good. It's just that it happens so seldom, and when it does, it's usually because the pessimist saw the problems and corrected them.

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Writing progress
For the past few months, I've had nothing for the Storyblogging Carnival but chapters from Fire. The reason for this, as I've stated before, is that I've been working on Fire's sequel, or more accurately, Part II of the book for which Fire is Part I. Well, I finished the last chapter of that yesterday. Now, all I have to do is write the Epilogue over Christmas vacation, and I will have finished it this year, which is the goal I set for myself at the end of 2004. I'm very happy to have completed it, and I look forward to revising it, after I've set it aside for a while and revised Eyes in the Shadow.

While in the midst of this task, I've noticed that I'm writing a lot more recently, producing the chapters I had planned to write ahead of schedule. I get like that when I'm finishing a writing project, eager to get to the end. I had the last chapter of Eyes written about a month before it was time to post it. I'm also like that at the beginning, whem I'm still eager to get going and busy giving the initial shape to the characters and the ideas, eager to get to the good parts which I've envisioned in my head. It's the middle where I have the most difficulty, muddling through difficult passages, disciplining recalcitrant characters when they veer off the course I've set for them, and realizing halfway through that I didn't research my central premise well enough to make my story's underlying conceit believable. That's when I want to call it quits and give up on a story, when the glorious end is only a will o' the wisp spark in the distance. Once I muddle through that part, and the end hoves into view, that's when I start galloping full speed ahead to cross the finish line with yet another overreaching metaphor. Then all is well with the world. At least until the first revision, when I realize what a mess I've made of the middle, beginning, and the end.

Friday, December 16, 2005

A new webcomic
I've been checking out a lot of fantasy webcomics recently. No real reason beyond curiosity and an interest in new reading material, I admit. Just now I came upon something very rare. It's not at all uncommon to find a webcomic with beautiful artwork--many of them are quite gorgeous. Intriguing and entertaining stories are a dime a dozen, as well. What is rare is to find a webcomic with really good writing. Perhaps I'm letting my personal bias as a writer sway me, but what I noticed about No Rest for the Wicked was not the artwork or even the story, but the writing. The dialogue is wonderful, and the monologues powerful. This comic draws on numerous fairy-tales to put together a haunting story, and with a short archive, you can read through it in about an hour. Have a look. Now I better get reading the Storyblogging Carnival entries.
Aftermath, Chapter 13 of Fire
The Rest of the Story: The whole of Fire can be found on my Writings page in PDF format, while the portion of the story that's been published on this blog so far is on this page.

As you may have already realized, you're not reading the final version of Fire. If you go read the PDF, you'll seem some differences, mostly grammatical and stylistic corrections, but also the occasional changes in dialogue or character's thoughts as I sorted out difficulties both with characterization and with way the world is set up. The problem was when I went looking for Fire, the version I found was an old one, not the one on the PDF. I've now located the final revision, hiding in a backup directory, but since I've posted the old one so far, I'll continue to do so. The differences really are minor, and this way I think it's more internally consistent. If you want the final version, you'll have to read the PDF.


Chapter 13
Aftermath


“You should be glad that you’re not human.”

“That goes without saying,” Talnek told the witch as she dabbed her foul-smelling concoction on his face. He had no doubts about Mitveh’s abilities, but he also knew that his wife’s best friend had come more to keep an eye on him than to fix his hurts. Anyua had insisted that Mitveh accompany him when he had ordered her to stay behind to advise their son. Talnek frowned at his wife’s spy, and said, “Is there any particular reason you’re thinking of?”

“A human would probably scar from this wound,” she answered, her fingers working the salve into the cut. She had assured him that the painful burning sensation meant that it was working.

“Scar? What do you mean?”

“Sometimes injuries leave a permanent mark on a human’s body. They don’t seem to be able to heal completely.”

“Just one more reason why we’re superior to them,” Talnek grunted, wondering whether he meant it. He had never expected such a fierce battle. Despite being outnumbered ten-to-one, the humans had fought like... well, nothing natural. Like one of those machines the philosophers used when they studied the stars, complex collections of gears all working together perfectly. These Novari had fought like that: organized and disciplined. The king wished he had brought goblins with him to wear down that engine; as unreliable as they were in battle, he’d sooner depart with a hundred goblins than one Orc. The Novari had cut apart hordes of Orcs, holding formation even in the heat of battle with a calmness that had to come from intense training. He had not seen anything fancy about Novar swordsmanship, but their methodical use of swords and shields had proven effective. The whole thing had unnerved to Talnek, which probably explained his rashness.

“So what possessed you to battle that last human one-on-one, anyway? You nearly got yourself killed,” Mitveh said. Her words irritated him more than her salve.

“I wanted to see if these humans were as good as a fully-trained sul warrior. They weren’t.” Individually, their technique had surpassed that of a well-trained an-sul, but it did not measure up to the sul. That last human had been another matter. His armor had marked him a commander, perhaps even royalty among these humans, and his guard had fought hard to protect him though he himself hadn’t shied away from bloodshed. He had led his small contingent to the thickest part of the battle, where they fought from horseback until their steeds wore out, then jogged in full armor when the horses failed. Like the rest of the calvary, they had worn full breastplates rather than the banded armor of the other soldiers and used smaller shields. The commander had lost his shield along the way, instead holding his sword in both hands. Though it had almost twice the length of the short swords used by the footsoldiers, the blade had moved like lightning. Talnek had struggled to make contact with his scimitar, and his dirk had proven unsuitable to parry the human’s powerful blows. In the end, the human’s exhaustion rather than the king’s skill had done him in. He must have fought over a dozen skirmishes, while Talnek had been forced to use his sword only twice earlier.

With a groan, the king got to his feet, knocking over the stool on which he had been sitting. Mitveh tsked him, but let him let him go since he was as bandaged as she could get him. He wanted to look over his men at the tasks he had set for them. At least twice as many Orcs had died has humans, although they had slaughtered them all in the end. Perhaps they should have given the humans the opportunity to flee instead of walling them in with warlock magic. Talnek wanted to believe that these Novari would have run if given the chance. The southern barbarians always broke when the battle turned against him.

The afternoon sun shone in the king’s eyes as he headed in the direction of the ruined wall. Gar appeared at his side before he had gone twenty paces. The warlock’s red robes trailed through the blood-spattered slush as he limped along, leaning on a staff as tall as himself. He had waited for Talnek to leave the witch before approaching him. The king didn’t think that Gar really feared Mitveh, or anything else for that matter, but while he went out of his way to tweak the other witches--something his mere presence did with ease--he avoided her. The warlock didn’t say anything and Talnek refused to speak first, so they walked in silence until they came to the wall. A gaping hole stretched about two hundred feet on either side of the twisted, half-melted iron strips which had once barred the gate. Only blackened rubble remained of the wall’s massive stone blocks there, nothing larger than the size of an Orc’s fist. Beyond the area where the warlocks had brought devastation, the undamaged wall stretched in either direction. Only a few Orcs remained on the east side of the wall, where Talnek had ordered the camp set up. Not enough order had returned to the army to see the job done yet. Those troops he had managed to bully into submission now pitched the camp or dragged off bodies to the pyres burning in the west, but many still pawed over the empty Novar fort in hopes of loot. Picking their way over the rubble, the king and the warlock found a chaotic jumble of soldiers on the other side.

All around them, sul and an-sul shouted to their king, while only his fellow warlocks greeted Gar. Talnek waved back to his bloody troops. Gar acknowledged no one. The frenetic celebrating among the Orcs gave no hint of the heavy casualties they had suffered. Those not still searching for loot celebrated with drinking, singing, and those incessant drums which had begun to give Talnek a headache. The king couldn’t help smiling. Victory should be enjoyed, and anyone who minded should just keep his mouth shut, whether he be king or warlock. He gave his silent companion a sidelong look.

“What do you want?” he asked Gar finally.

Gar gave a slight smile, as if he had gained some advantage. “You know what I wanted. You should have let us destroy them.”

“We did destroy them.”

“No, you and your soldiers butchered the humans,” Gar hissed. “You wouldn’t let the warlocks do more than watch.”

“You neutralized the Domini, didn’t you? You blasted a hole in their wall, kept them from fleeing with a wall of fire.” The blackened ground where their burning wall had stood still smoked. “Isn’t that enough?”

“That was child’s play. With over three hundred warlocks fighting in this battle, we could have razed this place, burned every single human to ash without risking a single Orc. Instead you lost, what, thirty thousand Orcs? You threw away over a third of your vanguard to take this place.”

“Could you have done that? With the Domini?”

Gar shot him a sharp look. He obviously hadn’t realized how much Talnek knew about the trouble the Domini had given them. The king had his sources, even among the warlocks. “They were more trouble than we had expected, but we handled them. Just three times their number would have overwhelmed them. We had thirty times.” Talnek wished he could tell when Gar was lying, wished he knew what odds the warlocks needed to match the Domini. Even so, he didn’t say anything. He thought that Gar had told the truth as far as it went, but the Domini had inflicted heavy casualties among warlocks and soldiers both before Gar had rallied his peers. His actions during the battle gave him primacy of place among the warlocks now. His political health had returned quicker than his physical health, a mere ten days since the unfortunate encounter which had nearly ruined them both. Talnek had ambivalent feelings about that: though he respected Gar’s abilities, both magical and political, he didn’t trust him.

“Magic is no way for anyone to die, even a human,” Talnek said.

“And what is a good way for a human to die, a dirk through the belly?” Gar had apparently heard about Talnek’s duel. “A hacked-off head? More importantly, what’s a good way for an Orc to die?”

Talnek spun on him, glaring into those dark eyes, his hand wrapped around his sword’s hilt. “A victory by magic would have been an empty one. Every Orc in the army would have muttered about it.”

“So it’s better to have two happy Orcs than three unhappy ones, especially when the missing one is an-sul?”

Idly, Talnek wondered how Gar could get his math right in the middle of an argument. “So is that what this is all about? The an-sul versus the sul. Sul died in this battle as well, you know.”

“What, two hundred, three hundred, a thousand? What’s that compared to twenty-nine thousand an-sul?”

“There are more an-sul than sul in this army, damn you!”

“Not that many more. An an-sul is three times as likely to die.” Talnek didn’t bother to work through the math, which he knew Gar would have gotten right. “How do you justify feeding them to these Novari for the sake of sating a little bloodlust?”

“Have you ever seen unsatiated bloodlust, warlock? It is an ugly thing. For an Orc to stare at a detested human and be denied the chance to vent his rage... I’d love to watch your beloved an-sul turn on you when you tried to protect them from the nasty humans.” Talnek knew he should control his temper. He disliked throwing away the lives of the an-sul as much as Gar did. Maybe more, as Gar had never convinced the king that it was compassion that had motivated him to proclaim himself the defender of the an-sul. Talnek had to deal with harsh realities, however, of which the way of war was just one. Angry or not, he had spoken plain truth, and he suspected that Gar knew it just as well.

Fortunately for both Orcs, a commotion broke out among the pyres at that moment. The Orcs had been burning the human dead in a separate fire from their own, and the shouts came from the direction of the human pyre. Both Talnek and Gar spared another moment to glare at each other before turning together and hurrying in the direction of the fire to the south of the fort. Talnek quickly outpaced the warlock, who could only manage a limping trot.

He had neared the edge of the human fort, beyond which he should have a clear view of the pyre, when a sul rider came galloping around the corner. The king held up his hand, shouting “Halt!” The sul looked at Talnek, and then his eyes, already as round as wagon wheels, went wider as he kicked his horse even harder. Talnek stared stupidly at the rider until the dull pounding of the pony’s hooves caused his spine to shiver. He just had time and sense enough to leap out of the way, directly into the stone wall of the fort. He heard a shout over the ringing in his ears and saw a flash of yellowish light through the blurriness in his eyes. Dull pain roared through his entire skull, centered at the point of impact on his forehead. He knew the pain would sharpen as the initial numbness faded. When his vision cleared, he saw Gar holding the pony’s reins, the Orc who had been riding it lying on his back. Talnek’s first instinct was to strangle the warlock for attacking one of his soldiers. That the soldier had tried to run him down didn’t seem to matter. Then he heard again the shouts and screams and remembered why he had come. This time he could tell that Orcs were dying. He forgot about Gar and his would-be trampler, instead rounding the edge of the fort to face a myth come to life.

In the midst of the fire stood a beast of which Talnek had often heard but which he had never seen. The huge lizard-like creature had a long, sinewy neck topped by a narrow head more graceful than any lizard’s. Its equally long tail twitched about almost spasmodically, knocking several Orcs aside. Yellow eyes glared at the soldiers around it while its massive claws shifted, searching for firm footing among the burning bodies. Great scaled wings fluttered above its head, waving about awkwardly as it sought its balance. The beast stretched at least forty feet, though most of that length was in its neck and tail.

Those Orcs with the sense to run had already left the scene. As many as five or six lay torn and crushed on the ground, one still screaming weakly. Only an-sul remained here, their only sul supervisor lying supine behind Talnek. An an-sul commander was yelling at the other Orcs, trying to rally them to fight the beast, but the monster apparently took note of his shouting. A claw tipped with talons nearly a foot long lashed at him, tearing through his armor and transforming his commanding yells into pain-filled shrieks. At that, some of the other Orcs turned to flee, while the truly clever among them held absolutely still.

Gar came along beside him, dragging the pony which had nearly run him down and saying, “Your less than respectful horseman still lives. Until you decide to execute him, any--” He stopped short when he saw the beast. The pony whinnied in fright. Not taking his eyes from the dragon, Gar reached out to stroke the pony’s nose, somehow managing not to gouge the horse’s eyes out in his distraction.

“Do something, warlock!” Talnek yelled as Gar came beside him, still dragging the pony. He immediately regretted raising his voice as pain flared through his head.

“What?” Gar asked, his voice calm despite the look of amazement in his wide eyes. His usual perfect control, Talnek thought.

“Use your magic, of course. Surely you can drive this beast off.”

“Warlock magic is fire magic, Your Majesty.” Gar never used that address except sarcastically. Of course, Talnek didn’t know of many Orcs who did use that form of address with respect. “That, if you haven’t noticed, is a dragon. Fire is not particularly effective against dragons.”

“Then give me that horse!” Talnek snarled, snatching the reins from Gar’s hand. He pulled himself into the saddle and just sat there until the throbbing behind his eyes subsided; then he drew his sword, wondering what spirit had possessed him. The pony showed more sense and balked until Talnek’s kicks and curses forced it into a run. He hadn’t gotten far before smoke began billowing from the flames, not ordinary smoke, but an inky black substance which gathered around the dragon’s head. It shook its head, trying to get free, but the cloud of smoke clung to it, growing larger and thicker by the moment. The dragon roared in fear, leaping into the air with its powerful wings beating swiftly. It seemed almost as startled at this as the Orcs, and its flapping lost its rhythm as the beast crashed to the ground, crushing several an-sul. Having lost its hold on the dragon, the black mist swirled in the wind of its wings before dissipating.

Talnek had closed the distance, the heat from the fire warming his face and the stench of burning flesh filling his nostrils. He cut his horse across the dragon’s exposed tail, striking at it with his sword. The blade bit into the scaled flesh no more than a few inches, and Talnek didn’t wait around to make another slice. He twisted his horse to take him clear of the tail, ducking as its length whipped through the air, just inches above his aching head. The dragon’s head turned on its long neck so that it stared directly behind itself at the fleeing king. Talnek pulled his horse about, raising his sword with a shouted challenge that made his head ring so much he feared he would black out. The dragon twisted its body around with more speed than such a large creature should have possessed. It roared as it surged forward to meet its adversary. Talnek put his heels to his horse, knowing that he could not expect to outlive this charge. One of the an-sul, shaken from his amazement by this interplay, lifted his crossbow and fired. The bolt struck the beast’s neck and ricocheted harmlessly from its scales, but other Orcs also remembered their weapons now. They began pelting the dragon with a rain of crossbow bolts. A ball of flame joined the bolts to flash in the beast’s face, causing its head to snap back though it had not done any visible damage.

With a roar that sounded almost Orcish, the dragon lifted itself once more into the air. For a moment Talnek, feeling the driving wind from its unsteadily beating wings, thought it would topple from the sky as his unchecked charge passed underneath, crushing him. However, it banked a circle around its tormentors and then lofted higher. Even on the ground it had looked graceful. In the air, its beauty struck Talnek silent, fortunately cutting off his victory cry before it split his head open. The green scales refracted the light of the afternoon sun, nearly blinding the king. It beat its long wings, shaped somewhat like a bat’s but longer and more graceful, and wider than the dragon’s length, then struck out southward.

Gar caught up to him as he watched it. The king didn’t turn away until he saw only a shining dot, waiting for the warlock to say something. When Gar seemed unwilling to share his thoughts, Talnek spoke instead, “Well, what was that? Yes, I know it was a dragon, but I thought they dwelt in the East, not here.”

“It seems you were wrong,” Gar grimaced at him, then admitted, “I didn’t know they would be here either. I never thought I’d see a dragon. That one wasn’t full-grown, and it didn’t seem to know much magic.”

“Dragons know magic?”

“So I am told. The older ones do, anyway... much more than any mere warlock. I wonder how old he was? Not yet a century, certainly. Maybe less than half that.”

Not old, only a century? How long do dragons live? Talnek wondered. He said, “I don’t care how old he was. What I want to know is where he came from. What was he doing here?”

“Perhaps we should ask,” Gar said, gesturing to the an-sul milling about. Dead and injured Orcs intermixed with burning human bodies, while the uninjured looked around dazedly, showing little sign of mental activity. The king and the warlock accosted one of the few trying to assist the injured. He had a loaded crossbow in one hand, and his eyes kept looking skyward for the return of the dragon. Curiously, they flicked toward the fire almost as often.

He seemed ready to fire at the king and the warlock as well until Gar spoke, “Hail. What come here?”

“Big beast. Kill Orcs,” the crossbowman responded, lowering his weapon.

“Where from?” Gar asked.

“From fire,” the Orc said, gesturing at what remained of the blaze.

“But where before fire?” Gar asked, impatient.

“Be-fore? Come from fire,” he replied, waving his crossbow at the fire and accidentally loosing a bolt. Fortunately, it struck one of the burning humans, narrowly missing a writhing Orc close by.

“Did you see the dragon arrive?” Talnek asked. “Where did it come from?”

The an-sul gazed at him in bewilderment, then gestured again with his fortuitously emptied crossbow. “From fire. Beast come from fire.” He looked at the two of them shrewdly, then leaned forward to whisper, “Fire-lizard.”

Talnek sighed. “He’s not exactly a fount of information,” he said to Gar. “Let’s see if we can help some of the wounded.”

They did their best to aid the survivors until the witches arrived to take over. When they had the opportunity, they asked more questions, but none of the an-sul had seen the dragon before it landed in the midst of the pyre. The sul supervisor had not awoken, and the witches didn’t think he would any day soon. No other sul admitted to seeing anything.

“If I didn’t know better, I’d say it came from the flames,” Talnek told Gar in frustration.

“Dragons are not spontaneously born from fire,” Gar responded. “No matter what some of the less reliable stories say. This wasn’t a newborn, anyway. Most likely it saw the fire and was curious: dragons are attracted to fires like moths.”

“Too bad it doesn’t burn them like it does moths.”

“Bite your tongue, Your Majesty.” Only Gar could lace that respectful phrase with so much venom. “Dragons are not our enemies. There are stories of cordial relations between Orcs and dragons.”

“This one wasn’t friendly. Most of the stories I remember don’t consist of cordial relations.”

“He was young, and probably confused and frightened. Relationships with dragons are as varied as the creatures themselves. They are fiercely independent, and will deal with Orcs, humans, Kawyr, and even stranger creatures as their own opinions dictate. They may enjoy the company, or they may decide we make better dinner than dinner guests. On the whole, though, they seem to prefer lower animals for food. They’d rather just avoid intelligent creatures.”

If you can call humans intelligent, Talnek thought. “Well, the next time we run into any dragons, I’ll let you do the negotiating. Hopefully he’ll find you a better conversationalist than I do.”

“Do you really think we’ll encounter more of them?”

Talnek snorted, “For all I know, these mountains are full of them. Curse those Kawyr for convincing me to do this.”

“On that, you and I are agreed,” Gar said, meeting Talnek’s eyes and holding them.

“Do you really think the Kawyr intend to betray us?” Talnek asked. He had heard this argument before.

“I think they are using us, as they have used us before,” Gar said. “And I think you are too much under their influence.”

“So you think they control me? I should kill you for making that accusation,” Talnek said, his voice low.

“I think that they may have access to the same geas as the druids, though to a lesser degree. I have spoken to some of the Muirthin who have met them.”

Talnek was smart enough to consider the possibility. It might explain why the Kawyr always seemed to win any argument he had with them. He was much too smart to admit his uncertainty to Gar, though. “I should like to see how you deal with them.”

“So would I, if they would deign to meet with anyone other than yourself.”

“I shall discuss that with them when we meet next,” the king said as he turned to go. They had promised to meet him the night after the battle. The Kawyr had odd opinions of when the meetings should occur, never appearing when he expected, but they had kept their word so far. Talnek knew he would see them in a couple of hours. He did not look forward to it.


This is a 3,943 word excerpt of a 90,110 word novel.

Thursday, December 15, 2005

Mark of the Penguins
Mark Steyn actually likes March of the Penguins, but he still finds plenty to complain about:
So where do I come down – do I see these fellows as conservative penguins or gay swinger penguins? Well, call me crazy but they’re penguins, and I don’t look to these guys for broader lessons in life, at least until this new ice age that’s about to frost up Europe gets going. Perhaps the problem is that penguins c