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Friday, September 30, 2005

Christian Carnival is up
I meant to mention it yesterday, but the latest Christian Carnival is up at In the Spirit of Grace. It's apparently carnival number 89. I'd lost count myself. There's lots of good stuff there, so go read it.
Done!
Well, I've finally submitted my story for the Faith-in-Fiction Conversion Story contest. As usual, the story wasn't so much finished as abandoned. I can always do another revision, and everytime I do I find something that absolutely must be changed. Despite the fact that I've had three different people read the third version and tell me that it looked good and they had no suggestions for improvement, I went through two additional revisions. There eventually comes a point when I have to say that's it, it's as done as it's going to get. Right now I'm just trying not to worry about it, since I know that if I do, I'll find yet another essential flaw in it.

At least now that I'm done I can start putting up real posts rather than cheap links to splattered birds and giant squids!

Thursday, September 29, 2005

Good news for cryptozoologists
Every once in a while, the legends are true (from FOXNews):
When a nearly 20-foot long tentacle was hauled aboard his research ship, Tsunemi Kubodera knew he had something big. Then it began sucking on his hands. But what came next excited him most — hundreds of photos of a purplish-red sea monster doing battle 3,000 feet deep.

It was a rare giant squid, a creature that until then had eluded observation in the wild.

Read the article, but more importantly, have a look at the pictures. That's one big squid!

Wednesday, September 28, 2005

What's snarge?
Believe it or not, it's what you get when a bird hits an airplane:
"It's bird ick," said Smithsonian snarge expert Carla Dove, who heads the lab. Technicians identify the snarge DNA using sequencing technology, then enter the sequences into a national database. Scientists can then tell what kinds of birds are commonly smashing into America's airplanes, something of intense interest to both the Federal Aviation Administration and the U.S. military.
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And its not just birds. Sometimes jet-stream encounters can take a page from the X-Files. "We've had frogs, turtles, snakes. We had a cat once that was struck at some high altitude," said the Smithsonian's Dove. She says birds like hawks and herons will occasionally drop their quarries into oncoming planes. "The other day we had a bird strike. We sent the sample to the DNA lab and it came back as rabbit. How do you explain to the FAA that we had a rabbit strike at 1,800 feet?"

Cool, but disgusting. And is it wrong of me to be insanely curious about how that cat got there? That must have been a big hawk.
A new underrepresented minority
Did you know that 57% of today's college students are women? Considering that women make up only 49% of the population of that age group, that means that women are 37% more likely to go to college. Glenn Reynolds speculates on some reasons why men aren't going to college:
Some of them, of course, get good-paying jobs that don't require a college degree. Plumbers, electricians, and building contractors face their own sets of barriers, but they don't need a college degree. (And, as an upside, those jobs aren't likely to be outsourced.)...

There seems little doubt that universities have become less male-friendly in recent decades, to the point of being downright unfriendly in many cases. The kind of statements that are routinely made about males and masculinity in classrooms and hallways would get professors fired if they were made about blacks, gays, or many other groups. Sexual-harassment policies start with the presumption that men are guilty, and inherently depraved. And colleges now come at the tail-end of an educational system that is (compared to previous decades) anti-male from kindergarten on, meaning many males probably just want to get out as soon as they can.

Of course, affirmative action and sensitivity classes for the insensitive dominant gender (women) sounds like a fun reversal, but if I'm going to stick with my principles, I have to say that if it's a dumb idea when applied to sensitizing men about women, then it's dumb the other way too. My preferred solution would be to shrug it off. We should deal with the more egregious examples of prejudice, but I detest the liberal witch-hunts designed to root it out. I'd rather open up the playing field and let market forces deal with the problem. Glenn points out that this discrepancy has some wider implications, however:
I would suggest, though, that the issue is of national import, and deserves more attention. As Larry Summers noted — to his chagrin, but accurately nonetheless — the hard sciences are still a largely male area (though they're managing to chase many men away, too), and there's not much prospect of more women getting involved. If men in general are reluctant to enter higher education, then the growing shortage of American-born scientists and engineers (noted by Ray Kurzweil here) is likely to get worse. This is likely to have significant national security implications.

And don't forget the problems pointed out by the USA Today article Glenn references:
This is ominous for every parent with a male child. The decline in college attendance means many will needlessly miss out on success in life. The loss of educated workers also means the country will be less able to compete economically. The social implications — women having a hard time finding equally educated mates — are already beginning to play out.

And therein lies the biggest question raised by this whole crisis: if there are so many women looking for educated men, why do I have so much trouble getting dates?

Tuesday, September 27, 2005

New blog on the roll
I've discovered that a good friend of mine has a blog, Cambridge Picks, so I've added it to the blogroll. I'd tell you her name, but as she doesn't do so in her blog, I think she'd rather remain private. I've further discovered that a lot of the folks in Park Street's Writers' Group also have blogs. I'll link to them once they tell me where their blogs are. I've invited them to take part in the Storyblogging Carnival.
Storyblogging Carnival XXVIII is online
Storyblogging Carnival XXVIII is now online at Tales of Tadeusz. Thirteen entries this time, as many as we've ever had. We'll see whether we can grow even more in the weeks to come. I met a few more blogging writers last night, whom I've invited to take part.

Monday, September 26, 2005

Only in Boston
Okay, maybe not only in Boston, but I don't expect that too many churches have a writers' group. I've decided to get involved with the Soli Deo Gloria arts group at Park Street. They have a Writers' Group which meets on Monday nights for writers interested in getting published. It should be interesting, help to improve my writing, and give me a chance to discuss the theological issues which crop up when writing fiction. I'll let you know how it went.
The last letter
I'm afraid that the folks at Letters from Babylon have stopped blogging. It had been rather slow for a while, but last week they officially shut down the blog. I've been reading their blog, and commenting on it, almost from the beginning. The bloggers were mostly Grad students in Boston when they started, and their blog reflected their experiences as Christians in academia. As I'm an alum from a Boston Grad school, I identified closely with their circumstances. In fact, I knew Tony Jimenez before he started blogging, as we met at college, and I met John Zimmer at a wedding only a couple of months ago. Many of them still go to the same church as I attend, and I'm sure I'll see them around, but I'll miss their writing.

Saturday, September 24, 2005

Weekly Webcomic Update
Sluggy Freelance — I'm not usually a huge fan of the Torg Potter storylines, but this one had a great ending. Torg shows them how to really use a time machine. And then it's on to Oceans Unmoving 2, and we see Sir John Jacobs in action as he dresses down a really creepy fortune teller. Meanwhile, Calix is still being punished and Blacksoul is after Bun-bun.

Day by Day — Sam and Zed have some fun on the beach, at least until Zed says something stupid. That didn't take long, did it? Some fun arguments between Damon and Jan, over Katrina and Porkbusters, are punctuated by an aww-inspiring hug. And, as always, there's some fun mocking of the MSM, with special mentions of Michael Yon and Dan Rather. Talk about a contrast!

Scary Go Round — So in order to out-con the old men who conned them, Shelley and Amy are disguising themselves as old ladies. Heh, it might work.

College Roomies from Hell!!! — Maritza's still doing weekend guest comics. I wonder how long that'll last. They're pretty fun. In the real CRFH comics, Roger goes to Mike for help in hiding his mother's death from his sister. Bad idea, Roger. Mike's idea of help is locking Steve and Waldo in the closet with Lanolin, so Lily will have to find another purple sheep. Then Dave finally returns, with both wrists wrapped in bandages, one of them sprained when Steve fell on him, the other after Dave punched Waldo out. Dave's backbone seems to be lasting this time. I still have a bad feeling that Dave hasn't run into the worst of the reversal of fortune he's due after that conversation with Blue.

General Protection Fault — Ki and Nick are busy with the wedding planning, but Ki decides it's finally time to tell Nick about her old boyfriend, Sam.

Schlock Mercenary — While his crew floods his ship with water, Captain Tagon decides it's time to lift off. Hopefully his crew can swim.

Friday, September 23, 2005

Christian Carnival online
The latest Christian Carnival is up at Digitus, Finger, & Co. Check it out.
Contact, Chapter 7 of Fire
The Rest of the Story: You can find the complete, uncut version of Fire, in PDF format, here. Or you can read the story that's been posted to the blog so far on this page.

And I return to Gaius's point of view for this chapter.


Chapter 7
Contact

Gaius kept his head close to his horse’s neck, trying to make as small a target as possible. Zephyrus, his grey stallion, could have outpaced the other horses, but he was keeping at the rear for a reason. The Dominus rode beside him, upright in his saddle with his head turned so he could face the oncoming Orcs. Lightning crackled from his fingertips, leaping from Orc to Orc and felling the foremost among them. Unseen blows struck the Orcs with enough force to shatter bones. Invisible barriers caused horses to stumble. Each time the pursuit would slow while the Orcs witnessed the fate of their companions. It would always renew before the humans had gone far. The Orcs’ quick ponies wove in and out of the trees more easily than the Novari’s bulkier horses, and if not for the Dominus they would have caught up by now. They had tried, with their small recurved bows, to take down a few Novari, but none of the arrows hit their mark, instead bouncing off some unseen wall if they neared the Dominus. Gaius wondered why the Orcs continued the chase even though they were losing horsemen and doing no damage. From what Gaius knew of Orcs, stupidity seemed the most likely.

Gaius had to grab the Dominus’s reins several time to make sure his horse kept up, rubbing his hand raw by the time they reached the encampment. The tribune gave a relieved shout at the sight of the ditch and wall fortification. If that barrier, nine feet high from crest to trench, did not stop the charging Orcs, then the legionaries on top of it would. Gaius struggled to bring the Dominus’s headstrong horse into the camp, slowing it from its full gallop in order to get it past the defenses. As soon as he had come to a halt just inside and wiped his eyes to clear them of the burning sweat, he dismounted and held the Dominus’s horse for him to do the same. The Dominus slid from his horse’s back, then staggered before Gaius caught hold of him.

“Are you all right?” Gaius asked, not concerned for the Dominus’s well-being so much as the magic which had kept them alive.

“No, I am not!” the Dominus said, pulling out of his grip. He leaned one hand against his horse, just drawing deep, ragged breaths. The chestnut pawed the ground but otherwise held its place.

“What’s wrong?”

The Dominus turned to look him in the eye. Gaius tried to return the gaze, which was disconcerting since he couldn’t see any eyes, just a faint hint of a face underneath the hood. The Dominus nodded as he came to his decision. “It is considered very poor form for a Dominus to show weakness, but the more you know, the better the chance we’ll survive to worry about my lack of decorum.” Gaius didn’t speak a word, uncertain what he could say.

“A Dominus has limits. It takes energy, mental and physical, to empower Circuits--spells, you’d call them. I... misjudged when destroying the cache. It took more energy than I expected, and now I’m feeling the effects. That, combined with my attempts to keep the Orcs from riding us down...” The Dominus took a deep breath before continuing. “I am at my limits. If I expend much more energy, I may kill myself. I’m not sure what help I can give you now. You’ll have to fight these Orcs yourself.”

“But--”

“You should be fine. Your numbers equal theirs and you have a well fortified position. Unless they have warlocks, you should be able to hold out here.”

Victrinus, done with issuing orders, came over to where they stood. “You should move back from the wall. Any arrows fired our way could reach you here.”

“Victrinus?” Gaius said as they followed him from the camp’s perimeter to the first line of tents. “What is your opinion of our chances?”

“It depends how true the stories about Orcs are. From what I saw, they aren’t as ugly as they say. I hope the rest is true.”

“What else do the stories say?”

“That they’re stupid, without discipline or order. That they attack first, and think second, with no thought for overall strategy or tactics.”

“They didn’t seem too bloody smart when they were chasing us,” Gaius said.

The Dominus spoke to that, “Don’t mistake that mad dash...” He paused to draw a deep breath. “That dash through the trees for a good indication of Orcish tactics.”

Victrinus eyed the Dominus distastefully, but admitted, “They were trying to catch a much smaller force before it could report to a larger one. You take risks to do that. They haven’t rushed to follow us; instead, they’re waiting for the rest of their cohort to catch up. I can’t say what they’ll do now. I wish the histories told more about the Orcs.”

“Histories?” The Dominus had recovered enough of his breath to give his voice the scorn appropriate to his words. “I wouldn’t call them that. At best, they’re self-serving half-truths told by commanders who wanted to improve their image in Novaro. At worst, they’re incomplete legends mixed with a good amount of myth.”

“Are you saying they’re wrong?”

“What else do you think I’m saying? While it’s true that most Orcs are stupid, their leaders are as smart as you, which may not be saying much. Their footsoldiers lack order or discipline, but the commanders have a good feel for overall strategy, and strong tactics won their fair share of battles in the last war.”

“Well, if they’re that smart,” Victrinus said, “neither of our armies will be going anywhere soon.”

“What do you mean?” Gaius asked.

“Any commander worth his pay could see that our forces are pretty balanced. They have somewhat larger numbers, so in an open battle he might risk it. With us in a fortified position, he’d just be throwing away his soldiers. What he ought to do is contain us and wait for reinforcements.”

“How do you know that there are reinforcements?” Gaius asked.

“I saw that supply cache. It was meant for a much larger force than this. Much, much larger.”

“Now you’re an expert on Orcs?” the Dominus asked. “They may not be as stupid as your stories say, but they don’t think like we do, either.”

“I don’t see that attacking this camp with what they have would be very smart, any way you look at it,” Victrinus said.

“Oh, they have reasons. They don’t set the same value on lives that we do. Their ruling class would throw away all of their underlings for a large enough prize. If they have warlocks, they may believe that their magic tips the odds in their favor. Also, I angered them by destroying that supply cache. That will make them furious, and anger, on top of their unreasoning hatred of humans, has led to some bad decisions in the past. Finally, if they know anything about Domini, they may think now would be the best time to attack.”

Victrinus just looked puzzled at that last one, but he nodded. “If they come, we’ll be ready. Commander, we should prepare for an attack. I’ll arm the men with spears to better hold the defenses.”

Gaius nodded. Watching Victrinus at the receiving end of a lesson would have been fun if someone other than the Dominus had given it. Victrinus went back to shouting himself hoarse, ordering the centurions to distribute spears in place of the usual javelins, since these would better fend Orcs from the earthen walls. The Dominus watched without offering any further advice. Gaius stood where he was, trying to look commanding. He itched to be doing something, but he had no idea what. He was a tribune, one of the highest ranking commanders in the Novar legions, but he had no real experience in war. While Victrinus and some of the older men were cutting their teeth in the Agnatius Rebellion, Gaius had only been a child, literally cutting his teeth. His military career, during a time of relative peace, had seen little fighting outside a few skirmishes against bandits and Kawyr, battles where the forces numbered in the dozens. He could understand now why many of the Senators felt that the army had grown soft. If a real war was coming, the Empire stood ill-prepared with men like him in charge.

He could not fault his training. Gaius knew it all in theory: tactics, strategy, leadership. He had led forces of men larger than this one, on patrols and in mock battles. But now, with a real enemy coming and no way to avoid them, his responsibility frightened him. He didn’t want to give the commands telling his troops how to defend their own lives. If Victrinus was willing to do it for him, for once Gaius was willing to let him.

One result of being the commander, even if only in name, was that others with no idea what to do flocked to him. The horsemen, tired from the ride and with no responsibilities in a siege, all clustered nearby. After some thought, Gaius gave the command for them to order themselves. He informed them that they would be the reserve in case the Orcs breached the defenses. They moved to the center of camp, where the thoroughfares leading east-west and north-south crossed to give them easy access in all directions. Gaius paused to take up a good spear before he mounted. They had not found a strong location for the camp, as such did not exist in these forests. Rather than on a hilltop clear of obstructions, the Novari had laid out the camp among the trees, enclosing several in its perimeter. The lines of the camp lacked the precise, straight lines the Novari preferred, the tents giving way to trees in several places and the walls curving around unyielding root systems. Even so, the trees added only a few blind spots to Gaius’s survey of his surroundings. Once in his saddle, he had a good view over the low, mud-streaked leather tents to the approaching enemy. He also noticed the faltering light, as even the slight dappling of sunlight visible on the forest floor dimmed. Those storm clouds he had seen earlier must be directly overhead by now.

He watched the Orcish army gather outside their camp, keeping their distance outside of the archers’ range. The horsemen remained mounted on their agile little ponies. Shaking their bows and shouting at the Novari in a language that Gaius did not recognize, they milled around the nearby trees. Every once in a while, one fitted an arrow to string and let fly, but the shafts never reached the encampment. The Orcs didn’t seem eager to approach the walls. Victrinus had archers ready in case they did, since he felt confident that the longer bows of the Novari would outrange the Orcs’ short bows. They were probably waiting for the rest of their forces to arrive before they attacked. That happened surprisingly quickly and with surprisingly little order. The Orcish footsoldiers did not arrive in a marching column, but instead started as a trickle of soldiers, with the first few to arrive pushing themselves to the head of the horsemen. After some brief argument, the horsemen ordered them to the back of the line. Soon that trickle became a flood, and the bulk of the soldiers took up position behind the horsemen. As the flow of soldiers slowed, some more mounted troops appeared, a few of these wearing blood-red robes.

“Warlocks,” the Dominus muttered, also mounted for a better view.

Gaius looked at him, remembering something from the stories he had never believed. The legends described warlocks as menacing, otherworldly figures with some vague connection to the Orcs, not as the same species. These appeared to be Orcs in red robes.

“Are you sure?” Gaius asked.

“Of course I’m sure,” he replied. The Dominus searched the ranks for more of them. “Just the three. They’re still too many.”

“Can you fight them?”

“This morning I could have dealt with three.” He didn’t sound as certain as the words implied. “Now I’m too tired to stop them from tearing this camp apart.”

Gaius looked again at the three strangely dressed Orcs. He didn’t want to believe that so few could swing the balance of the battle, but he couldn’t escape how much damage the Dominus had done at the Kawyr village. If someone directed that kind of power against the Novar camp, he could level it. “Are you saying we don’t stand a chance?”

“I’m saying that you need to kill them quickly.”

“And how are we supposed to do that?” Gaius snapped. “You’re the one with the damn magic.”

“Stick arrows in them, poke them with swords, they’ll die just like any other Orc. The trick will be getting past the defenses they’ll have against such attacks.” The Dominus heaved a sigh before continuing. “If you tell me when you’re about to attack them, I may be able to penetrate their protection.”

“You think we should go after them?”

“Of course. I suggest you believe me when I tell you they are the most dangerous enemy out there.”

Gaius did not know whether to believe him or not. “How close will the warlocks come?”

“They’ll have to come within range of your bows to attack.”

“Close enough to target them individually?” Gaius asked. At long-range, the archers launched their arrows at formations rather than at individuals. Unless they came much closer, no archer could pick them off.

“I wouldn’t wait for them to come that close. Don’t worry, if you cover the area with enough arrows, you’re bound to hit them.”

Arrows that could break up a charge would have to be spent against three Orcs in red robes. Gaius grimaced at the waste, both of the arrows and of the men who would die in the unhindered charge. While he did not trust the Dominus, Gaius didn’t doubt the man’s self-interest in his own survival. Whatever he did or did not know about tactics, he must have had good reason to fear the warlocks. If nothing else, Gaius now had something to do. He turned in his saddle and instructed the nearest rider to go to Victrinus and tell him to concentrate his archers on the three red-robed Orcs. The transverse crest made the centurions easy to find among the crestless helms of the other soldiers. Gaius had no difficulty picking out Victrinus, who turned from consulting with one of his fellow centurions to speak to the man. The old centurion looked in the direction of Gaius and the Dominus. He didn’t appear happy, but he sent the messenger to the centurions in charge of the archers next.

The noise coming from the enemy had reached a fever pitch as they shouted and screamed at the Novari in their harsh-sounding language. Many of the Orcs were rattling swords on shields, others clashing weapons together. The number carrying a weapon in each hand surprised Gaius. He had seen some Western swordsmen use a light sword and a dagger in tandem, but these Orcs wielded two large swords or axes as though they weighed nothing. Some of the footsoldiers carried large crossbows instead of blades, which, though they couldn’t be anywhere near as powerful as the Novar siege engines which they resembled, could probably punch a hole through Gaius’s muscled cuirass. Though all the weapons appeared well-made, the footsoldiers’ armor looked mismatched and slapped together. The horsemen had armor as good as their weapons, sturdy breastplates over mail, all covered by colorful tabards depicting stylized emblems. One Orc with an upraised saber sported a red falcon on a white background, while a nearby Orc drawing his bow showed a broken arrow on his tabard. Gaius saw one with a black winged lizard which he thought might be the mythical dragon. He wondered just how mythical it was.

The amount of scrambling around suggested an imminent attack. Officers herded footsoldiers and horsemen alike. It didn’t look easy, since the Orcish army seemed more interested in snarling at the humans than in whatever their officers said. Despite that, they drew up with disconcerting speed. Gaius tightened his grip on his spear and wondered whether their fortifications could hold against that mad mob. Without any discernible signal, the mass began to move forward. The small ponies outpaced the foot, but rather than rushing the fortifications, the horsemen split and flanked the camp while the foot surged between the two wings. Gaius knew it for a wise move, as the ponies wouldn’t have made it over the wall. His real attention focused on the warlocks, however, and they rode forward at a stately pace, letting the footsoldiers stream around them. Though the foremost soldiers had entered bow range, the archers held their fire. A few more moments passed before Victrinus signaled and the archers drew their bowstrings to their chests, aiming upward for maximum distance.

The arrows left the bows too late to break up the first charge. Even as they reached their apex, the first Orcs reached the walls. Novar spears thrust down into the milling mass, killing any who started to climb the wall, but the Orcs kept coming. Gaius pulled his eyes away to watch the falling arrows, all focused around the three red figures. At that range, the archers had little accuracy, so only a few came close to their targets. Gaius watched in amazement as the arrows approaching one Orc exploded into flame so that little more than ash remained by the time they struck the ground. The Orc seemed unperturbed by the ashes that settled on him. The sight so startled Gaius that it took him a moment to realize that the arrows targeted at the other two Orcs had found their marks, and two warlocks lay unmoving on the ground.

The fierce fight continued at the walls. Shouts and screams rang through the camp as Orcs slipped past the spear-wielding men in the front ranks. The Novari behind those ranks, armed with short swords, dispatched them before they got far. Meanwhile, archers began to launch their arrows into the crowded Orcs still beyond the wall. Orcish archers launched their own volleys, but most of them, aimed high to avoid their fellow Orcs, flew over the heads of Orcs and humans alike to land deeper into the camp. Some came uncomfortably close to Gaius.

Zephyrus caught some of Gaius’s impatience as the tribune watched his men fight and die. He patted his horse to calm him, but that did little to relieve his own tension. Though he chafed to do something, the smart, responsible thing for him to do was to wait with his reserve. He hated being smart and responsible.

Gaius had begun to consider jumping into the fray anyway when the Orcs withdrew, leaving behind a massive number of dead. His own men had fared better, with only a few casualties. He should not have found that surprising. Gaius knew that Novar soldiers fought well, but he had still expected them to come off worse than they had. Taking advantage of the respite, the centurions sent the more seriously injured men to the Philosopher physicians.

“You didn’t do us much good,” he said to the Dominus, sparing a moment to look in his direction.

If he could have, Gaius would have taken his words back. For the first time, he could see the Dominus’s face, a human face. Gaius wasn’t shocked to see that the all-powerful Domini were human, since he had never believed the stories that said otherwise. What did shock him was the condition of the face, drawn tight across his skull and pale as ivory, made even paler by contrast to the dark hair plastered to his forehead. His breath came in gasps as he swayed in his saddle, and he didn’t even flinch as Gaius reached out a hand to steady him. With considerable effort, he looked at the prince and replied in a hoarse whisper, “You should be dead. It’s only because of me that you aren’t.”

“What are you talking about?”

“I killed two of the warlocks--” Gaius must not have hidden his skepticism because the Dominus’s gaunt face twisted into a sneer. “Yes, your arrows did the actual killing, but it was I who penetrated their defenses. That last one was stronger than I expected, though, and he beat back my assault. Since then...” He drew a breath that made his whole body shudder. Gaius could feel his arm trembling beneath the black sleeve. “Since then, we have been dueling. He’s launched attack after attack that would have leveled this camp, and I’ve been fending him off. I haven’t been able to hurt him... I’ve barely been able to stop him.”

“I haven’t seen any sign of this duel,” Gaius said, careful not to sound too unbelieving.

“The first sign you’d have seen of it would have killed hundreds of your soldiers. Do you think I’m lying to you?”

“If that’s what you’ve been doing, how much longer can you hold off this warlock?”

“I’m too weak to fight him anymore. My next attempt will leave me either dead or unconscious.”

“And then what will happen?”

The Dominus looked towards the attackers. “That one’s strong. His fight against me has worn him down, but he’ll still be able to turn the battle in their favor.”

Aside from a few burning arrows, Gaius had not seen any sign that these warlocks had any power at all. Dozens of his men had already died because he’d redirected the archers. Dozens was better than hundreds, however. “Can we stop him?”

“Can you train your arrows on him again?”

“That didn’t work before. What makes you think arrows will kill him this time?”

“If I wait for him to attack, I can breach his defenses while his attention is elsewhere. We’d have to let him go through with his assault. He’ll probably destroy part of the fortification and the men defending it as well, but we’d be rid of him after that.”

“You mean you’ll let him destroy our wall and kill those hundreds you claim to have saved?”

“Just give the command!” the Dominus hissed. “That’s all you have to do! Telling your archers to shoot at him won’t get any of your men killed. Let me decide how to fight this warlock. Believe me, if I go down without killing him, you will lose this battle.”

“Having my archers hold their fire until something happens could get lots of my men killed, and if something does happen, that gets lots of my men killed. Neither of those sounds good to me.”

“Do you have a better idea?”

“Yes. Rather than have the archers wait just in case the warlock does do something, we’ll let them do their job. That way they may break up the charge. If the warlock does attack, they can target him then.”

“If your archers don’t fire the moment he attacks, they may be too late. I’m not sure how long I can keep his defenses down.”

“They’ll be quick enough.”

“They better be!”

“I’ll go tell Victrinus myself,” Gaius said as he kicked his horse into a trot.

Finding Victrinus proved simple. The crested helmet and silvered armor marked out all six centurions, but Victrinus alone rode his horse, rushing back and forth along the defenses and shouting orders at the top of his lungs. He reined up when he saw Gaius coming. “You shouldn’t be here,” he said. “A mounted officer will draw their fire like nothing else.”

“I don’t see you walking,” Gaius returned. Besides, the Orcs’ shortbows couldn’t reach this far. He hoped that applied to their crossbows as well.

Victrinus grunted. “What’s up? That Dominus get another marvelous idea?”

“Yeah, he wants to target the warlock, that Orc in red robes, again.”

“My archers could have launched several flights into that main charge while they were waiting for those warlocks to come into range. You tell that black monster that I’m not going to waste any more arrows trying to hit one Orc.”

“I’m not your messenger boy, Victrinus. I’m your commander,” Gaius said. “If I ordered you to target that warlock, and only that warlock, would you do it?”

“It’s a bad idea,” Victrinus growled.

“Would you do it?”

“Yes, I’ll do it! All the soldiers killed by this foolishness will be on your head, though!”

Gaius blinked. He’d won an argument he hadn’t meant to have. How had he managed to talk himself into doing what the Dominus wanted? “Er, that’s not necessary.”

“So you still know how to listen to sense. That’s good.”

Gaius felt his ears burning. What good did it do to win an argument if you immediately had to back down? “I meant that I wasn’t ordering you to target the warlock.”

“If you say so,” Victrinus said.

“Damn it! I’m telling you I--oh, never mind! Look, the Dominus thinks the warlock is going to do something. Whatever it is, you’ve got to give your archers orders to fire at him as soon as it happens.” Seeing Victrinus getting ready to argue, Gaius added, “They can shoot at whatever you want them to until then.”

“So they only have to target the warlock if he does something, huh? I can live with that. What’s he going to do?”

“I don’t know. Something magic directed against our fortifications, I suppose. I don’t know what it’ll look like.”

“I’ll tell them to start shooting at the warlock the moment something weird happens,” Victrinus said. “Is the Dominus going to be able to stop him from hurting us?”

“I don’t think he can. He’ll make it possible for us to kill the bloody warlock, though.”

“After the fact. Well, we’ll manage.” Victrinus hurried to another centurion, whom he sent scurrying off. Gaius returned to his reserve force.

After that, they could do nothing but wait. In less than half an hour the attack came, Orcs rushing the walls yelling and screaming while their archers, afoot and mounted, shot over their heads. The legionaries readied themselves to receive the new assault, but they could not defend against what happened next. Just as the onrushing Orcs neared it, a length of the wall exploded. The earth shook in response as the sound deafened Novari and Orcs alike, and the charge shuddered for a moment as Orcs were knocked to the ground. The attacking wave had too much momentum to be stopped by a mere explosion, however, and oncoming Orcs trampled over their fallen brethren. The Novari took longer to recover. Those still standing stared at the dirt and smoke billowing into the air, mercifully swallowing up the remains of the soldiers who had manned the destroyed section of wall. Only Gaius could hear the Dominus muttering, “Hurry! Kill him now!” The tribune had reached out to take his trumpeter’s instrument from the man’s white-knuckled hands, thinking he would signal the bowmen himself, when some of the archers remembered their orders well enough to fire their arrows in the direction of the warlock. Others recalled themselves at this display, and within seconds, a storm of arrows fell upon the warlock.

Gaius didn’t wait to see whether the arrows struck home. He had seen Victrinus disappear in the explosion, and the Dominus had slid from his horse just seconds after the archers opened fire. Everyone who could tell him what to do was gone. He would have panicked if he had had the time. A gaping hole had opened in the defenses, and he had command of the reserve force: what he had to do was clear. Gesturing to his trumpeter to sound the call to his men, Gaius put his heels to his horse’s flanks and charged towards the opening. Victrinus would have had fits at his breaking formation without even looking to see if the remaining horsemen followed, but the centurion must have died in the warlock’s magic, and sometimes you had to lead by leading. He just hoped his men didn’t trample the Dominus. Zephyrus, named after the west wind, surged forward with a speed undiminished by the morning’s flight. The grey quickly reached the Orcs funneling through the crater left by the warlock’s magic. Gaius just had time to see that some of the Novar legionaries were regaining their senses and hurrying to the defenses before he closed on the first of the Orcs to climb out of the crater. Gaius’s spear drove through his chest before the Orc could react.

Trying to pull the weapon free while galloping past the dying Orc resulted in a snapped spear. Gaius cursed his luck as he reversed the spear to use the spike on the other end. Orcs swarmed all around him, cutting him off from the other horsemen, none of whom had managed to keep up with their tribune. He stabbed wildly with his shortened spear while his horse kicked and bucked, nearly unseating him several times. Zephyrus had the sense to fight an enemy, but not enough sense to watch out for his rider at the same time.

Gaius spun about, stabbing at everything green. The spear tip dripped crimson with Orc blood, which was as red as that of humans. Only his higher position and the longer reach of the broken spear allowed Gaius to keep the mob at bay. Even so, he took several blows on his small circular shield. He twisted in his saddle, urging the horse to spin as well, as an Orc armed with a long spear rushed at him from behind. It wasn’t going to happen: Zephyrus could not or would not turn fast enough. Gaius could clearly see the spear, but he could not bring his body around to block it. He threw himself forward in the saddle, knowing even so that his back was too large of a target for the howling Orc to miss...

The Orc fell just a few feet short of him, a Novar javelin in his back. Paulus followed with a group of less than twenty soldiers. He gave his commander a grin that would have looked confident if it hadn’t been so sickly. Gaius fell back behind the men as they formed a double line, large shields held high to offer better defense than their banded armor. At Paulus’s signal, they ploughed into the Orcs, stabbing from behind their shields. To Gaius, they looked like farmers harvesting grain: systematic, efficient, and unhindered by the enemy.

The tribune noticed the oncoming rider just in time. The mounted Orc carried a long sabre and wore a fine steel breastplate mostly hidden by his tabard, which bore the black dragon emblem that Gaius had seen earlier. A half-full quiver of arrows hung from his saddle, but he had no bow. Gaius’s first good look at one of the Orcish ponies showed him a black stallion as fierce as any war-horse, stockier, but not round or soft-looking. The rider appeared different from the other Orcs Gaius had been fighting, his skin paler, his face fine-featured. The footsoldiers had overlarge noses and small eyes. This one looked too beautiful for the snarl he now wore as he gave his war cry. With a shout sounding something like “Behmweerthen,” he charged the soldiers from behind, heading straight for Paulus.

Gaius had fallen back over a hundred feet behind the soldiers in order to survey the battle and determine what needed to be done, taking a position to the right of the line while Paulus anchored the flank on the left. He didn’t have the angle to meet the charging Orc head on. Instead, he reversed his spear again and hurled it like a javelin. The spear had never been weighted for such use, and breaking it in half hadn’t helped. Its wobbling flight missed the Orc by a foot, but its passage just in front of his face broke his charge as he pulled his pony up short. The tribune had his sword out and his horse moving. The Orc moved faster than he expected, however, and his small pony had turned to meet the young commander by the time they made contact. Gaius’s higher position should have given him the advantage, but the Orc aimed at the horse rather than the rider, leaning forward and chopping at the tall gray’s leg. Zephyrus, still smart enough not to sacrifice himself, danced aside, causing his rider’s own sweeping sword to go wide. The Orc’s pony spun faster than Zephyrus, and Gaius nearly took the sabre in his gut as his grey turned to find the Orc already there. The horse’s cleverness worked in his favor as Zephyrus leapt forward so that the blade passed behind Gaius. Rather than turning, he charged forward, hoping to gain enough distance to come about safely. A quick glance over his shoulder showed that the need had passed. The Orc had vanished.

He pulled his horse to a halt and looked around. The Orcs who had poured into the gap were fleeing now, and they did not stop once they passed beyond arrow range. The Novari had routed them. While Gaius saw plenty of mounted Orcs, they now outnumbered the remaining footsoldiers. Hundreds of green bodies lay where the wall had once been, slaughtered by the disciplined Novar troops. Leaning forward to pat his horse, he closed his eyes and wished for a little sleep. Gaius had no hope of fulfilling it, since he couldn’t sleep with the cold water running down his back. He wondered when the light, steady rain had begun.


This has been a 5,654 word except of my 90,110 word novel, Fire. A total of 37,154 words have been published on this blog so far.

This is the first battle scene I've ever written. I tried my best to be historically accurate, but after sorting through half a dozen mostly contradictory books, I decided I needed to just go for it. It's more about the personal experience than the details of the tactics, but I don't think I messed it up too badly.

Thursday, September 22, 2005

Hosts needed!
I was looking through the Excel worksheet I have to keep track of hosts for the Storyblogging Carnival, and realized that after Eric from Tales of Tadeusz hosts next week, I don't have anyone else. Ever. So if you'd like to host a Storyblogging Carnival, please let me know. The following dates are free:
  • October 24, 2005

  • November 7, 2005

  • November 21, 2005

  • December 5, 2005

  • December 19, 2005

  • And the rest of eternity...

Thanks to everyone who's hosted so far!

Update (9/23/2005): Removed October 10th, as Sheya of Tales by Sheya has volunteered to host it.

Wednesday, September 21, 2005

Mauritania update
It's been a while since I've written about Mauritania. Between Katrina, the religious debate, and the Storyblogging Carnival's firt anniversary, I just haven't given it the attention it deserves, so let's go digging through the news, shall we?
  • Mali's president is expressing support for the new government, as is Morocco's king. In both cases, it's little more than diplomatic noise, not really indicating much. Ghana, on the other hand, still opposes the new government.

  • Mauritania's one of the countries affected by the cholera epidemic in West Africa.

  • It took nearly a month, but the new government implemented a comprehensive amnesty of political prisoners on September 2nd. Some political prisoners had been released earlier, and I wasn't the only one concerned that the ones released seemed to mainly be alleged Islamists.

  • While Qatar was still giving asylum to ousted Mauritanian president Taya, they've begun meeting with Mauritanian officials. Taya had been staying in the Qatari city of Doha. On September 6th, the Mauritanian ambassador to Qatar offered to let Taya return and even take part in of the new democratic process. They must be pretty confident, as they're going to be the first ones on the chopping block if Taya actually wins.

  • The new government has followed the environmental tradition of the old one in ordering a two month break from industrial fishing in order to allow for reproduction of certain species.

  • On September 8th, the opposition party, Union of Forces of Progress, called for a return of exiles and an end to slavery, both worthy goals. Some exiles are already returning in the wake of the general amnesty, so I'm not clear on what the UFP wants done differently.

  • The oil exploration doesn't seem to be going as well as had been hoped.

That's all I've turned up recently. Let me know if you spot anything.
Carnival of the... Godless?
It's not the sort of thing I usually link to, but Chris Hallquist of The Uncredible Hallq was kind enough to include me in the Carnival:
Last week ago, I made a post publicizing a new carnival called God or Not, designed to bring theistic and atheistic bloggers together. Also working to this goal is a debate I got from a Christian blogger and an agnostic. To Donald: please consider hosting God or Not, last I checked there's three atheists signed up and only one theist.

I'll also note that I got way more visits from to the Carnival of the Godless than the Christian Carnival. I wonder why.

Anyway, with a personal appeal like that, I had to look into this God or Not Carnival. The website does a decent job of describing the carnival, although there aren't any examples to point to yet, as this upcoming one, on the topic of Sin, will be the inaugural edition. I asked the Evangelical Atheist what sort of posts the carnival was looking for, and he sent me the following information:
At first, the topic was Original Sin, so that may focus your writing a bit. We expanded it to increase the number of submissions. I'm thinking about writing something on plenary indulgences. You can be as broad or specific as you like, as long as it relates substantially to sin.

I've volunteered to host the Carnival in March, and I'd like to encourage other Christian bloggers to take part as well. It should be fascinating discussion.

Tuesday, September 20, 2005

Judicial extremism
Stephen Markman has some excellent thoughts on what an extremist judge really is:
Senate Democrats have warned the president to avoid sending them "extremist" judges. While there is considerable room for debate as to how best to identify truly "extremist" candidates, a starting point might be to focus on those nominees who are most inclined to disregard the admonition of Chief Justice John Marshall in Marbury v. Madison, which established judicial review, that the role of the judge is to say what the law is rather than what it ought to be. For, if there is any aspect that is central to the proper exercise of the judicial power, it is respect for the separation of powers and an appreciation of the distinction between the judicial and legislative roles in a tripartite government.

While there are few judges who ever expressly assert their disregard for the words of the lawmaker (whether that lawmaker be Congress, a state legislature, a county commission, or simply the parties to a contract), such disregard is often effectively achieved through a variety of alternative, less noticeable means. Therefore, to assist the Senate in assessing “extremist” tendencies in judicial nominees, I offer for consideration several of the more prominent rhetorical devices that often cloak judicial fiats. Senators may wish to examine the prior opinions of nominees in order to assess their propensity for employing devices like the following, with the purpose of replacing the policy choices of the lawmaker with those of the judge.

Read it all.
Debate Round 3: Donald on Miracles
Okay, it seems Skeptic and I mostly agree on the matter of scientifically impossible, but now I'm at a loss to understand Skeptic's initial assertion:
Though the belief in miracles was once a respectable, even rational, position to hold (given our ignorance), it is no longer laudable today. Must I ask: Do virgins give birth? Do donkey's speak? Do people rise up out of their graves? When or where have you seen this, but in your imagination?

He's saying that miracles are impossible, that it doesn't make any sense to believe in them, but as far as I can tell he's making an assertion rather than an argument. He admits that it is just as much of an argument from ignorance to say that an unexplained event has a naturalistic explanation as to say that it is miraculous. The sum total of his argument, as I understand it, is that when faced with an unexplained event, it is more logical to assume that there is a naturalistic explanation than that it is a miracle, as experience shows that most such events have a naturalistic explanation. Up to this point, I agree. (There is the matter of divine providence to consider, the belief that God is at work bringing about His will in all things, even the ones with naturalistic explanations, but I concur that this sort of evidence for God is circumstantial and cannot properly be called miraculous.) I don't think, however, that Skeptic's offered any reason to rule out miracles. He complains that he's never seen one. Neither have I. That should not be a prerequisite for belief in them, any more than seeing an electron should be a prerequisite for belief in them. Miracles are rare events, and most people will never see one. We may, however, have an opportunity to examine the evidence for one, but we'll save that for later.

Skeptic also asks about my definition of miracle. That's fair enough, so let me try to be clearer. My definition is that a miracle is an "observable interaction of a spiritual element with the otherwise closed system of matter and energy." I put it in scientific terms, and admittedly, I put it in such a way that it may describe things that don't look like miracles. We can't always know whether a spiritual element was involved. To use my subway analogy from Round 2, we may know that the data looks weird, but we need some more information before we can make a conclusion as to what's causing it. A more relevant question is not what I define as a miracle, but what sort of event would I believe to be a miracle.

Let's take the Resurrection of Jesus, the central miracle of the Christian faith. What's observable about it? Well, first there's the fact that Jesus is dead. That's a measurable, quantifiable fact, although I did not personally perform the measurement. Then he's alive. That's also measurable and quantifiable, although again measured by someone else. So that's what's observable about it. But is it spiritual? Is the fact that a man came to life after being dead for three days enough evidence that I can say that a spiritual hand was required to do the resurrecting? Probably not. The data certainly looks weird, and it's so far outside of what our naturalistic explanations can encompass, that I'd be considering the word "miracle" even with so little, but I'd want more evidence. What sort of evidence? Well, a couple of angels appearing at the tomb helps, although I might consider them delusions or just strangers who seemed angelic. Then there's the fact that Jesus had been predicting his death and resurrection months before it happened, and that he performed other resurrections by what he claimed was the power of God. And there's what he said after the event, showing up where and when he wanted, talking to crowds of people, interacting with them physically, albeit with a new and improved body. Jesus, the one who resurrected others and had now been resurrected, is the one who says that his resurrection is a miracle, God at work. That's pretty convincing, like when the subway workers told us that the trains had been running all through the night that corresponded to the noise in our data continuing unabated, whereas on other nights it had ceased when the subway had closed for the night. Now the word of the subway worker may not usually carry tremendous weight. I wouldn't ask him about the theological implications of evolution, not unless I had some other reason to trust his judgement on the matter. But when he's talking about something he should know about, he has no reason to lie, and it fits our data so perfectly, then it's fairly safe to believe him. Likewise, as Jesus is the one who can best explain the significance of the Resurrection, and it so neatly fits the data, then I accept his word that the Resurrection is miraculous.

And here is where I wonder what Skeptic believes. Would he accept the Resurrection as a miracle, assuming it happened as the Bible reports? Or would he insist that there was a naturalistic explanation? How far would he go to explain it? I've heard some pretty wild and implausible theories trying to explain the Resurrection, including alien intervention. How implausible do the naturalistic explanations have to get before the supernatural one simply makes more sense? If Skeptic takes the view that there must be a naturalistic explanation, then he's basing his conclusions on faith more than I am. If his position is instead that such a Resurrection would be a miracle, but he believes that it didn't happen that way, then we're having the wrong argument. He's not presenting arguments that there can be no miracles, only that he has no proof of miracles. If that's the case, we need to establish what criteria are necessary to prove a miracle and work from there.

Monday, September 19, 2005

Storyblogging Carnival XXVIII is accepting submissions
Eric Ashley of Tales by Tadeusz will be running the next storyblogging carnival. If you have a story you'd like to submit, e-mail him at ericrashley-at-yahoo-dot-com, with the following information:
  • Name of your blog
  • URL of your blog
  • Title of the story
  • URL for the blog entry where the story is posted
  • (OPTIONAL) Author's name
  • (OPTIONAL) A suggested rating for adult content (G, PG, PG-13, R)
  • A word count
  • A short blurb describing the story

Entries are due at 11:59 PM Eastern time on Saturday, September 24th.
What the extremists are saying
CENTCOM has a webpage where they post translations of what the Islamic extremists are saying. They've recently posted a statement by Zarqawi's al'Qaeda organization in Iraq, taking credit for the attack last week and promising more. Most of it's fairly typical, but I found this part telling:
Approach us, O paradise. O brigade of martyrdom-seeker: Celebrate and sing the praise of God, for tomorrow you will meet the beloved ones, Muhammad and his companions. You have never accepted injustice, O lions of monotheism. This is your day. Go after the heads of the infidels, the Jews, the Crusaders, and the descendants of Ibn al-Alqami [derogatory term for Shia named after Ibn-al-Alqami, a Shia minister who was accused of betraying the last Abbasid caliph Al-Musta'ism during Hulugu's attack on Baghdad in 1258]. Do not show any mercy toward them.

Infidels, Jews, and Crusaders are the usual targets of the terrorists, but the fact that al'Qaeda specifically mention the Shi'ites, and in such a derogatory manner, indicates that they're still pursuing the strategy they've been attempting to implement for at least the past year. They know they have no support among the Kurds, and while there are Shi'ite extremists, they don't play too well with the Sunnis. So rather than trying to win support among those groups, they're targeting them. They're hoping that they can increase tensions between the Sunnis and the Shi'ites to the point of starting a civil war. I'm not sure whether they still believe that will work, but they may be able to keep the animosity running at a high enough level that building a successful democracy is impossible.

Whether or not a civil war happens, the failure to create a democracy will most likely result in three independent nations rather than one. Al'Qaeda will have succeeded in creating the impression of a failed attempt at nation-building by the US, but whether the Sunni nation will be friendly to them is an open question. They'd still have to duke it out with the Ba'athist secularists, and the results will be bloody. The thing to remember is that this is not the result that most of the Sunnis want. There's a reason they fought so hard against federalism in the Iraqi constitution. They know that if Iraq's three ethnic groups go their separate ways, they'll be the weak one, without most of the oil wealth their cousins possess. The Shi'ites and the Kurds wouldn't be sorry to see this happen, so the only two groups with a vested interest in a united Iraq are the Sunnis and the US. At this point the Sunnis want it both ways, turning a blind eye to the terrorists among them while certain that the US, whom they still hate, will prevent the worst case scenario from happening. I think maybe it's time for the US to start saying that splitting Iraq into three nations wouldn't be such a bad thing. If the Sunnis start to realize that they're the ones who will lose the most should al'Qaeda succeed, they might just turn against the terrorists.

(Thanks to SPC Claude Flowers for the heads up!)

Sunday, September 18, 2005

Debate Round 3: Donald on the Soul
It's been a week without any comments from me, since I've been busy working on my story. Even now, I'm only going to address one thread of Skeptic's argument, partly because I'm not sure it's a good idea to pursue both threads in a single post, and partly because the other topic is more complex and I haven't finished my response to it. Hopefully I'll have something up by Monday. Meanwhile, let me address the topic of the soul.

I'm not sure how Skeptic transitioned from my argument that the human person has two parts, body and soul, to the assumption that I believe there are three parts. As I read Skeptic's previous argument, he rejects that consciousness or mind is something distinct in itself. Instead, Skeptic takes the view that it is emergent, a result of the brain's cognition. I merely expressed my belief that the soul is not merely a manifestation of consciousness. It is something else. Consciousness is the result of the interaction of body and soul, it is, as Skeptic argues, emergent. As an analogy, consider a computer. A computer has both hardware and software. If, as a crude analogy, you consider the hardware to be the body and the software to be the soul, what I mean should become clearer. Obviously, software can't do much of anything without some hardware to run on, but without software, hardware has nothing to do. The distinctive behavior of a computer depends on both. But... software is not tied down to the computer. It needs a computer, certainly, but it can move from computer to computer, and behave in largely the same way as long as the computer is compatible and it can adapt to the differences. Software is a very different thing from hardware. Hardware, of course, can run different software, but its behavior changes vastly, as different software gives a completely different look and feel. Now, looking back at my earlier argument, which Skeptic seems to have forgotten, I never argued that the soul has much of an independent existence apart from the body. It's one of those matters I'm doctrinally neutral on. But I can see the soul being inactive until such time as a body is provided for it. Some body is necessary, but it is not necessarily identical to its former body. Thus the idea of God placing our souls in a resurrected body makes a lot of sense to me, in the same way that installing my old software on a new computer is perfectly reasonable, and something I've done before. This is, as I said, a crude analogy, and I'm not arguing that the soul is merely stored information or that it can be copied or deleted in the same way that software can, but I'm hoping it makes my position on the soul clearer.
Weekly Webcomic Update
Look, only an hour late! I'm getting better.

Sluggy Freelance — Sluggy was briefly down due to ISP problems, but it appears to be working now. In any case, this storyline's gone into overtime, as Pete wasn't able to wrap it up in the three weeks he had hoped. But it's quickly heading for a wrap-up. Torg meets the future President from Arkansas (I hope not) the first day. Then Snapekin, Thrope, Blearious Stank, and Torg and his friends are all tricked into coming together by Sneezy, who is really Wotcherclaws. And Pete pulls a twist by making Stank the lycanthrope--only he's not a werewolf, but a werelophant! While Thrope's an Animagus, and Snapekin's just along for the ride. Then Wotcherclaws, who's really a mouse Animagus, drives elephant Stank into a panic just in time for the Duh-mentors show up.

Day by Day — I complained to Chris that I have to work harder with Day by Day, since it rarely has a long storyline for me to summarize. The problem is I'm usually pretty lazy and just point out the people he mocks, although some weeks I try harder and point out a common theme. This week, you're just going to have to settle for me being lazy. The first thing Chris makes some sharp comments about is the MSM, and their desire to show bodies on television. Then he lets Jan win a couple of arguments on Bush.

Scary Go Round — Shelley and Amy can't raise the money they owe, nor can they get rid of the young folks who are ruining Oldbourne. So they hit on the idea of dating young geeks, stealing their intellectual property, \making it big in a short amount of time, and getting out before the bust. Seems like a sound business plan to me. The guys they meet actually seem pretty decent. I hope they don't use them too badly.

College Roomies from Hell!!! — One satanist didn't knock Dave out. Better drop another. While he's busy, Marsha's planning to fix all of April's and Margaret's problems, which will be a pretty neat trick. And Lily's hunting stolen sheep, and the terror caused from meeting an ugly satanist turns her on in one of the more disturbing comic I've ever seen. And as an added bonus, Xaxnar's filler is back for the weekend.

General Protection Fault — Dexter's story wraps-up, with Kyoko saving the day by discovering that the Eelorians cheated, using a Trojan horse they planted in the humans' system to frame Dexlar. With his name cleared, the robot decides to stay on the station.

Schlock Mercenary — Breya's been made into an ambassador to the fleetmind. Hopefully, she'll be able to puncture Petey's delusions of godhood. Unfortunately, her husband's joined the mind while she wasn't looking.

Saturday, September 17, 2005

Finally!
It took forever, but I finally got through the second revision of the story I was working on. Now I can send it out to my editors, who will hopefully turn it around very quickly, as I only have two weeks left before it's due. The second revision, where I read the story aloud and see how it sounds, is one of the most important revisions I do with a story. The result is way more satisfactory than what I get when I don't do that revision. For an example, compare Eyes in the Shadow, on which I didn't perform the second revision, with A Phoenix in Darkness, on which I did. Now, I like the story in Eyes in the Shadow, but I feel the writing in A Phoenix in Darkness is much betther.

Now that I've got it done, I can get back to the debate, where I haven't responded to Skeptic's latest post for a week, and to my regular blogging. At least until I get my readers' comments back and I need to go back to full writing mode for the third revision.

Thursday, September 15, 2005

Christian Carnival is up
This week's Christian Carnival is up at Psuedopolymath. I submitted the Great Debate to it. I also submitted it to the Carnival of the Vanities, Multiple Mentality's Items of Interest, and the Carnival of the Godless. Are there any I missed?
Review of the Supernatural pilot
I caught the premiere of the new WB show, Supernatural, the other night. This, unfortunately, put me behind on the second revision of my story, and now I'm going to get myself even more behind by writing the review of it. Be forewarned, there are spoilers below, but only for the first fifteen minutes or so of the first episode.

I've always had a soft spot for stories of humans against the supernatural. There have been plenty of TV shows on the subject, from Friday the 13th: The Series and Poltergeist: The Legacy (neither of which had any connection to the movies whose names they share) to Buffy the Vampire Slayer and The X-files. They had a wide range of quality and style. X-files and Buffy are two of the better known, and they take very different approaches. In X-files, the heroes were ordinary humans up against things they barely understood, while Buffy had heroes who were as supernatural as the enemy and who had vast stores of knowledge they could access to discover the villain-of-the-week's Achilles' Heel. Overall, I think I prefer the X-files take, although there the supernatural elements were rare intermissions from the uberstory of aliens and government conspiracies.

To give you a sense of the mood of this new show, let me describe the opening sequence, which begins twenty-two years ago:
A couple is putting their infant son and his four year old brother to bed in their home. As they leave the baby's bedroom and shut the door, the nightlight inside start flickering and the mobile starts turning on its own. Unaware of this, the parents go to bed.

Later, the mother awakes due to strange static-riddled sounds on the baby monitor. Her husband is not in bed with her. She goes to the baby's room and sees his shadowed form standing over the baby's crib. She starts to speak but he shushes her, so she heads back to bed, pausing along the way to tap at the hallway light, which is flickering. As she does so, she hears the TV going downstairs. Going to check on it, she finds her husband asleep in front of the television. In a panic, she runs back to the baby's room...

There's a scream, and the father wakes up from where he's sleeping in his easy chair, and he hurries up to the baby's room calling his wife's name. He finds his son awake but fitful, but no sign of his wife. He starts to tuck him in when a drop of dark liquid falls on the infant's blanket. He looks up...

His wife is lying on the ceiling as if gravity were reversed for her. Her eyes are wide and her mouth open, but the only sound she makes is a wheezing breath. Blood drips from some wound in her stomach. Even as he stares in shock, the ceiling behind her bursts into flame, the fire slowly reaching out to consume the woman as well. The father grabs his son, and when he finds his older child in the hallway, awakened by the commotion, he hands the infant to him and tells him to run. Then the father goes back in, and we see a rush of flame with a vaguely humanoid shape

The two brothers make it to the yard, where they are joined by their father, who was unable to save his wife.

That beginning was definitely disturbing and frightening enough to grab my attention. From there, the show shifts to the present day, where the younger son, Sam, is in college and preparing for a Law School interview. His brother, Dean, shows up in the middle of the night, asking for Sam's help to look for their father, who vanished on a "hunting" trip.

It quickly becomes apparent that what their father was "hunting" was ghosts. Whether or not he did this before his wife's death, in the years since he's become obsessed with tracking down the thing that killed her, along the way taking out any other supernatural entity he encounters. He trained his sons to do the same, teaching them weapons and martial arts in the process. As ghost hunting doesn't pay well (unless you get a show with the Sci-Fi channel), the three of them have supported themselves in some less than honest ways. And without the FBI badges which gave Mulder and Scully such access, they use a host of fake IDs and cover stories in their investigations. The younger son has been trying to find a normal life in college, and is reluctant to be drawn back in. Do I even have to tell you how successful he'll be at that?

We see how the two brothers approach the mystery their father disappeared while trying to solve, interviewing witnesses and researching history until they identify the type of menace they're dealing with, a type with which they're familiar, tellingly. Getting rid of it isn't a matter of choosing the right weapon, although bullets do turn out to be surprisingly effective, but of identifying the entity's weakness. I found the resolution very satisfying, although I thought the special effects involved were overdone. Subtle and sparing effects work well in this sort of show, and I was impressed with most of how they did things.

Overall, I really liked the show. It was both disturbing and scary, and managed to convey the feel of uncovering a dark mystery much better than shows like Buffy. Many series of this type start well, but quickly descend into a monster-of-the-week mentality, where dark and mysterious degrades into ugly and bizarre. I have no idea how well this show will manage, but I intend to keep an eye on it.

Tuesday, September 13, 2005

Slow blogging coming up
After all the work that went into getting the First Anniversary Storyblogging Carnival up and getting the debate going, I'm exhausted. Plus I still have a lot of work to do in order to finish the story I'm trying to write. I think the rest of the week's going to be a bit slow, blogging-wise. But really, given the sheer amount of material that's been posted in the last few days, I think a break is in order.
The Storyblogging Carnival Year One: My Favorite Stories
I'd like to mention a few of my favorite stories from this past year. This is not meant to be an all-inclusive list. The simple truth is that I haven't always managed to keep up with the carnival when other people were hosting, so there are quite a few stories I never got the chance to read. The ones I am listing appealed to me strongly enough to stay with me in the months since I read them. It's ultimately a subjective decision to include one story and not another, and says more about my eclectic tastes than the stories I'm not including. The ones I am including really are good, though.


From Storyblogging Carnival I:

Colossus
by Curtis Schweitzer of a_sdf
A 2,497 word short story rated PG.

"Colossus" is my expression of the power of the true American ideals--freedom, democracy, and equality. It expresses both the danger that the American ideal poses to dictatorship, oppression, and collectivism, as well as its place as the guiding conscience of the American soul. The story's abstract, future setting poses a world that has been stripped of liberty and justice--a world where the government's only recourse against the human need for freedom is to deny its existence.

They are soon to find out, however, the impossibility of such a task.

[As I've said before, this is the story which convinced me that a Storyblogging Carnival was possible, more by its mere existence than for its actual content. I really, really liked this story. It's short, but powerful, packing a lot of idealism into a dystopian future. Plus, as I've also said before, Curtis just does wonderful things with imagery. -DSC]


From Storyblogging Carnival II:

By Touch
by Wichi Dude of Wichi Dude
A 1,903 word short story rated PG-13.

A man uses an unusual talent to help his family. And passes that talent along.

[This was such a touching story, with just a small but powerful hint of the supernatural. Extraordinarily well done. -DSC]


Transcendence
by Dave Gudeman of Doc Rampage
A 2,607 word short story rated PG-13.

This story is either farce or tragedy, depending on your beiefs. If you believe that humans are no more than automatons, then this is an amusing farce about how the survival reflex responds in a situation that evolution didn't prepare it for. If you believe that humans are living souls, then this story is a tragedy about the evil that can result from pride and self-centeredness alone. No malevolence is required.

[Whatever Doc says, this one's a tragedy. It's also a great story concept, which will forever leave me jealous. Not because I didn't think of it, but because I did, only Doc beat me to it. -DSC]


Shadowed
by Andrew Ian Dodge of Dodgeblogium
A 2,975 word short story rated PG.

An exhausted man turns up at the Sage of Wales' front door begging to let in. Is he all that he says he is and who exactly is after him?

[Although this is the first of Andrew's Cthulhu tales I read, it's still my favorite. It hints at barely understood dangers, of secret battles against hidden forces, and horrors which can kill with fear. -DSC]


From Storyblogging Carnival III:

Walk With Me
by Sheya Joie of tales by sheya
A 500 word brief story rated G.

A walk with her big brother.

[This was Sheya's first entry in the Storyblogging Carnival, and I noticed it right away. It conveys the warmth and tenderness between siblings in a beautiful way. -DSC]


From Storyblogging Carnival IV:

Everything Happens on Halloween
by Darleen of Darleen's Place
A 1,498 word short story rated PG.

What happens when a Goth teen working in an occult shop meets something truly paranormal.

[Darleen writes really spooky stories. This one is off the scale in creepiness, as it, bit by bit, reveals the wrongness of what initially seems so normal. -DSC]


From Storyblogging Carnival X:

Last Gas
by Pete C of Engrossing Tales
A 2,849 short story rate PG.

On a dark, isolated road, the last gas for miles could turn out to be a saving grace... or something entirely, ominously different.

[Another spooky one. Are you sensing a trend? In some ways it's similar to "Everything Happens on Halloween," but a different writer gives it a different spin. I really love both of these stories. -DSC]


From Storyblogging Carnival XIV:

A Parable of Rain
by Jeff Harrell of The Shape of Days
A 5,419-word short story rated PG.

Willy Judson prayed every day. One day, his prayer was answered.

[This is the story that had me thinking that the Carnival might need an exorcism. Not that it's really clear that there are demonic forces at work in the story... that's the problem. A demon you know about you at least know to fight. It's the ones you don't who can truly corrupt you. This story is well written, well plotted, and it definitely makes you think. -DSC]


Guns, Boats, & Cadillacs
by Lyle Skains of Hermitville
A 4,373 word short story rated PG.

As she cares for her ailing father, Charlotte's life has turned into an endless cycle of Groundhog Days--until today, when she quite literally loses him.

[This isn't my usual type of story--you may have noticed a preference for the supernatural and the bizarre in the previous selections. In contrast, this one's ordinary and very real. Lyle is gifted at expressing the real frustrations of real people living imperfect lives. -DSC]


From Storyblogging Carnival XXIV:

A potato named McKenzie
by Goemagog of this space for sublet
A 547 word brief story rated PG.

Fighting the good fight against vegetation.

[This one's just really, really bizarre. I mean really. As you might have noticed, I have a taste for the bizarre, but this one's out there even for me. And I love it. -DSC]


So those are my favorites. I never really considered myself a fan of horror, but the Carnival gets a lot of those, and I really do enjoy them. That probably says something about me, but I'd rather not think about it.

Monday, September 12, 2005

Storyblogging Carnival XXVII--Our First Anniversary
Welcome to the first anniversary edition of the Storyblogging Carnival. Yes, it's really been a whole year since the first carnival. With a year's worth of storytelling in blog format under our collective belt, what's next? I have no idea, but I'm sure we'll have fun.

I honestly don't have much to say by way of introduction this week. I think I've said just about everything I could in the rest of the First Anniversary festivities. So let's just enjoy this week's entries:


Thag Not Like Angry Sky!
by Mark A. Rayner of The Skwib
A 280 word brief story rated PG.

The continuing saga of Thag and his clan — this time on a more serious note, reflective of this past week's events.

[I really liked this short, serious fiction. A necessary reminder of the frailty of human life. -DSC]


Part 11 of Scale 7 Artifact (Beginning)
by Dave Gudeman of Doc Rampage
The next 1,231 words of an 18,525 word story rated PG.

The team is away, but Daniel still harbors dark suspicions. Will his fears come true? Will Daniel's insane paranoia itself damn the mission? Only time will tell. OK, I'll tell you. Daniel's suspicions are well-founded, but you would know that already if you read the ealier chapters.

[Doc continues to spin his yarn with humor and hard sci-fi. -DSC]


BLEEP!!
by Eric R. Ashley of Tales of Tadeusz
A 2,020 word short story rated PG.

An annoyed troubleshooter searches for a reason why the new work crew can't keep up with the production schedule. Sci-fi/Humor.

[We're off the Death of a Blogger story for the moment, for something a little lighter. -DSC]


The Kai'Wyr, Chapter 6 of Fire (The Whole Story)
by Donald S. Crankshaw of Back of the Envelope
A 2,099 word chapter excerpted from a 90,110 word novel rated PG-13.

While Gaius and his soldiers are exploring the kawyr village, they're being watched.


Camp
by Trudy W. Schuett of WOLves
A 2,158 short story rated PG.

The purpose of Camp is not for summer getaways and winter hunting trips like everybody else’s property. Sure, it started out that way, but sometime in the late 1930s that changed. Officially, that is. I think it’s always been a place of refuge, a way station for people on the path to other things.

[This story was written especially for our first anniversary. It's a fascinating tale about the footnotes to history most folks don't read. -DSC]


Chapters 90, 91, 92, and 93 of The Child (Beginning)
by Sheya Joie of Tales by Sheya
The next 2,562 words of a 73,984 word novel rated PG.

A bit of sword practice in the morning turns into a hunt for a missing member of their group - and something even more unexpected.

[After a computer problem induced hiatus, The Child is back. Good to see you again, Sheya. -DSC]


Chapter 1 of Electricity
by Myke Bartlett of Electricity: A Novel in Increments
A 2,572 word chapter of a 60,000 word novel in progress rated R.

Aston Somerfield – 23, casual smoker and part-time alcoholic – has come to London to find himself. He knows who he's looking for, he's seen him on the cover of the NME. Drawn across oceans by fame and fate, Aston is keeping his diary empty to make sure he's available. Won't commit to anything until it's everything. But London has other plans.

When a virtual stranger calls Aston a few hours before his death, fate is derailed. Amid a hundred boozy evenings and romantic deadends, a mystery unfurls. Equally assisted and hindered by tremulous accountant Tom Hensley and dedicated loafer Steven Black, Aston uncovers a different London – one of murder, ghosts, dangerous emails and the second big bang.

As chaotic and random as the city it inhabits, Electricity slowly evolves into a mystery bigger than the universe itself.

[Okay, I'll admit I only skimmed some of these entries, but this one I didn't even have a chance to do that, as it was submitted late and there's a full 60,000 words online right now. However, it looks like a fascinating story, and when I get a chance, I'll have to start reading this. -DSC]


Chapters 8 and 9 of Britannia Revived (The Whole Story)
by Andrew Ian Dodge of Dodgeblogium
The next 4,677 words of a novel rated R.

The US President is having problems.

[A continuation of Andrew's near future story of the EU and it's many, many ills.-DSC]


The Quest
by Jason Pomerantz of Fiddle and Burn
A 7,000 word short story rated PG.

In honor of the Carnival's anniversary, here's a special sneak preview of a story that will be running in Fiddle and Burn over the next month: Thirteen year old Hal is obsessed with a violent computer game called Deathzone. When a new version comes out... he'll do whatever it takes to get a copy!

[This is quite a treat. Jason runs a blog he calls a comic strip in prose format, where he posts small bits of the story every day. He's making an entire storyline, weeks worth of posts, available to us ahead of time. Jason's a swell guy, ain't he? Now, if only I could convince J.K. Rowling to do the same with Book 7. -DSC]


A Slightly Different Love Story
by Josh Cohen of The New D-42
A 8,100 word short story rated NC-17.

A slightly different love story, in which two people fall in love, and events occur.

[As always, Josh's story needs a strong warning for explicit c